Mujhe Jin Pe Tha Buhat Aitmaad..

redidentity · July 5, 2007, 5:33am

Mujhe Nahi Maloom Ke Teen Ashaar Ki Iss Poetry Ko Main Nazm Kahoon Ke Kuch Aur..

Mujhe Jin Pe Tha Buhat Aitmaad
Wohi Log Ghar Ko Jala Gaye

Wo Jo Maal-o-Zarr Ki Hawas Main Thay
Mera Naam Tak Wo Mita Gaye

Meray Neem Shab Ke Chiragh Ko
Meray Yaar He To Bujha Gaye

Umeed Hai Aap Logon Ko Pasand Aye Ga..

Regards,

bheegiyaad · July 6, 2007, 11:43am

Re: Mujhe Jin Pe Tha Buhat Aitmaad..

mujhay uncomplete c lagee but nice:)

redidentity · July 6, 2007, 11:45am

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Thank You bheegiyaad.. umm.. pata nahi.. ho sakta hai k aur sher add hojayen iss main.. mainay kabhi socha he nahi.. ye to 1999 main likha gaya tha :$

Amal · July 6, 2007, 12:43pm

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Is sey kuch milta, julta pehley bhi parrh rakha hey, shaed aap ney bhi parrha ho. Anyway, keep it up and keep sharing with us :)

redidentity · July 6, 2007, 12:47pm

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:) Thank You.. I Really Dont Remember K Aisa Parha Hai K Nahi.. But Jab Likha Tha I Was Betrayed By One Of My Klose Friend.. :(

fazeelat · July 7, 2007, 11:11am

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very well

redidentity · September 10, 2007, 12:55pm

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thnx fazeelat.. :)

Omar_Faraz · September 10, 2007, 3:44pm

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Great lines, redidentity. I read a poem in English somewhere expressing similar feelings. I will dig it out to post here someday. I would like to translate your poem into English. Would you please define the following in English or Urdu?

**Aitmaad=

Maal-o-Zarr Ki Hawas =

Neem= dim?

Shab= evening, dusk?

chiragh= lamp?**

redidentity · September 11, 2007, 6:00am

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Aitmad = Trust
Mal-o-Zarr Ki Hawas = Thirst (in a negative way) for Money
Neem Shab = Late Nite
Chiragh = Lamp

Wese Thanks alot for appreciation :)

GuL-e-Tasbeeh · September 11, 2007, 7:05am

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Buhat khoob, kuch adhoori si lag rahi hey:-)

redidentity · September 11, 2007, 7:16am

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Jee Gul.. Thnx.. hmm adhoori si haina.. mujhebhi lagta hai magar na i was in 12th jab likhi thi.. n on a bus.. so khayal distort bhi huay thay :$

imagine na

Omar_Faraz · September 12, 2007, 2:15am

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Thanks for defining the difficult words.
Here's the first draft. Any suggestions?

*Those I trusted most were the
ones who put my house on fire

And those who lusted for money
were the ones who decried me

My friends were the ones who put off
the lamp that lighted my late nights *

K_Khan · September 12, 2007, 2:44am

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wah wah wah

arz kiyaa hai

lagee thee bhook bari der sai
ajee sunye kia kuch paka gayee?

ab shab kai akhri pehr mai
mere bijli bhi katwa gayee

mere rahe sahee neend
faQat kuch ashaar se ura Gayee

redidentity · September 12, 2007, 5:20am

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Kamran Khan and Omar :)

Thnx :)

Shab-e-Hijar · September 12, 2007, 6:35am

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Good job Ahmer :k: keep it up

redidentity · September 12, 2007, 6:38am

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Thnx :)