MUHABBAT OR BARISH...

Shazia_Arif · November 21, 2009, 8:06am

Muhabbat or barish ak se q hain?
Kabhi be inteha barasna
Kabhi barse bina he laot jana
Jo kabhi haath phelao to
Chnd qatre hole se girain
Girne k baad khali hath
Jaise!
Kisi ko be inteha chahna
Phir ussi se chupana
Or jb kaali ghata cha jaye
To!
Barson barasna,barasna or barasna…

rajey · November 23, 2009, 6:46am

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Vakai Barish aur muhabbat 2 alag cheeje nahin lagti...

Hum ne bahut pahle kabhi kuchh aisa hi likhne ki koshish ki thi.....bandish me

Tere chehre pe jab nazar gai, Mere dil pe ghata si chhayii thi
Jadu-ei saba si bahne lagi, jab chunar teri lahrai thi

Teri kali kali aankhon me, baadal aate aur jaate hain
Be sabab nazar jo mujhpe padi, dil par bijli bikhrai thi

6 lines aur but... abhi yaad nahin..

Shazia_Arif · November 23, 2009, 2:39pm

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v nice rajey, agar remaining 6 lnes b yad aa jain to zarur share karain.

S.786 · December 3, 2009, 8:07pm

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buhut omda khyaal , daad qubool kijye

Shazia_Arif · December 4, 2009, 6:19pm

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thank u so much s.786.

udaas · December 5, 2009, 11:59am

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nice

Shazia_Arif · December 5, 2009, 2:44pm

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thanx udaas.

KKF · December 5, 2009, 3:17pm

**
Shazia aapkii Nazam paRhii...bahot bhali lagi. Khayaal umda hai, bayaan zaraa saa dheelaa hai...chusti le aaiye to aur mazeed baat bane. uske liye qawaafii, ravaanii aur naGhmagii kaa aHtamaam kareN...gungunaa kar dekh liyaa kareN...yaa...bahot aahista aahista maddham aawaaz ke saath Khud ko paRh kar sunaayeN to aapko pataa chalegaa k kahan kahaN zabaan aTaktii hai ya'nii kahaN kahaN luknat paayii jaatii hai. jaise:

kabhii TooT kar barasna
kabhi yuN hii lauT jaanaa
kabhi haath ko baRh kar
boondoN se khelnaa****

etc

Allah kare zor e qalam aur ziyaada :)**

Muhammad_Adeel · December 6, 2009, 11:05am

**bohot khoob SIS … :k: **

Shazia_Arif · December 6, 2009, 12:32pm

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thank u muhammad bro.

Shazia_Arif · December 6, 2009, 12:35pm

u might b right bt 2 tel u the truth i first time wrote in blank verse so nt aware with the rules.thanx 4 the islaah.

Aryaan · December 14, 2009, 11:09pm

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Good One Shazia..

KKF · December 14, 2009, 11:39pm

welcome Shazia. its wasn't islaah btw lol...just a friendly input :)

Shazia_Arif · December 15, 2009, 9:38am

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thanx aryaan n KKF bt u seems 2 b a profesional poet so wil heartly b thankful agar issi tara islah karain ge.

terray_naam · December 16, 2009, 2:59pm

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Bohat achhey

Shazia_Arif · December 19, 2009, 7:15am

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thanx T.N.

Sannan · December 24, 2009, 11:58am

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hmmmmmmmmmmmmmmmmmmm cool

Shazia_Arif · December 26, 2009, 1:30pm

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thanx sannan hapy & surpirsed 2 c u here as well.

Sannan · December 30, 2009, 10:41am

Bus Aa gia mein ghomtay ghumatay