Meri Pasand ki 10 Ghazlen / Nazmen (ehsan uncle)

muqawwee123 · December 31, 2013, 5:05pm

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Thanks for compliments :hat:

kuch Barish per bhi ho jae

muqawwee123 · December 31, 2013, 5:06pm

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chRen nahin.. phir naraz hoke ghayab ho jaen ge

Microbian · December 31, 2013, 5:08pm

Ok waisy he doesn’t know about my new identity

mahool · December 31, 2013, 5:09pm

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^

muqawwee123 · December 31, 2013, 5:09pm

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cutenice62:

i didn't expect to login ever again and comment on any poetry but i like this ghazal a lot but ehsan sb i dont agree with your description of the shair specially this part "he is not expecting his love to return" he does not mean to say that he is not expecting his love to return, for me a poet when do poetry means he has hope, and hope never die, meray khayal may explanation yeh hai

agar is ko mahboob k hawalay say explain karain tu shair kehta hai k har sham meri is umeed may khushi say guzar jati thi k woo aye ga, lakin aaj ki sham may kuch aisi baat hai k umeed meray pay hawi nahi, bal k is sham may kuch bat hai k mujhay kuch yaad aa gaya or us yaad pay rona aya k wo sham or aaj ki shaam aik jaisi hai faqat mera mahboob meray sath nahi hai, or yehi baat ronay ka sabab hai...

agar is ki dosray andaz say explanation ki jaye tu wo aisay hai (an other view of the shair) insan jab jawan hota hai na tu us may bari energy hoti hai , us ko bari expectations hoti hain bari umedain hotin hain zindagi may, jawani ki har sham aik umeed or expectation say bhari hoti hai k kal aisa ho jaye ya kal ko kuch aisa ho ga, but jb wo burhapay may pohanchta hai or us ko khayal ata hai k may nay zindagi kaisay kamo may guzar di hai jis say zindagi ka maqsad hasil nahi howa jo insan ka ultimate goal hai Allah ki taraf say tu burhapay ki sham may usay apnay kiyay pay sharmindagi feel hoti hai, khonay ka ehsas hota hai or wo pichtaway say rota hai k haye wo sham or yeh sham, waqat aik he zamana badal gaya k may nay zindagi ka haq ada na kiya....

i am open to critics but i hope somebody understand how to understand poetry in different aspects.

shayari main umeed ko ziada tar subh se link kia jata hai, phir yahan sham aur umeed ka kia link hai?

muqawwee123 · December 31, 2013, 5:09pm

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sabr karen. agli dafa tarash aur phir aap

tarash · December 31, 2013, 5:10pm

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kahan hai cute & nice

mahool · December 31, 2013, 5:10pm

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I realized that I am in Ehsan Uncle’s thread… quote bhi kardiya…

Microbian · December 31, 2013, 5:11pm

Or aap ko purani nahi pta

muqawwee123 · December 31, 2013, 5:12pm

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chalo flooding band TP main bulate hain cutennice ko

Microbian · December 31, 2013, 5:13pm

Pta nahi ab hum is thread me flooding kr rahy

tarash · December 31, 2013, 5:17pm

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chalo chalo TP chalo

cutenice62 · December 31, 2013, 5:57pm

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aap samjhay nahi janab, jati hoi sham may jab aap kabhi bethain akelay may tu aksar aap aglay din k mutalik kuch na kuch soch rahay hotay hain, or umeed ka taluk waqat say nai hota, us ka taluk soch say hota hai or subha ko ziyada tar naye doar k aghaz k liyay link kiya jata hai...or yahan shaier ko aik haseen sham may mahboob k anay ki umeed hai, or second explanation may insan khush feham k toor pay umeed laga k betha hota hai k jaisay kabhi burhapa aye ga he nai ya sab jawani k door jaisa hai, lakin wo jb yaad ayee bohat yaad ayeee

ehsan · December 31, 2013, 6:15pm

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cutenice62:

i didn't expect to login ever again and comment on any poetry but i like this ghazal a lot but ehsan sb i dont agree with your description of the shair specially this part "he is not expecting his love to return" he does not mean to say that he is not expecting his love to return, for me a poet when do poetry means he has hope, and hope never die, meray khayal may explanation yeh hai

agar is ko mahboob k hawalay say explain karain tu shair kehta hai k har sham meri is umeed may khushi say guzar jati thi k woo aye ga, lakin aaj ki sham may kuch aisi baat hai k umeed meray pay hawi nahi, bal k is sham may kuch bat hai k mujhay kuch yaad aa gaya or us yaad pay rona aya k wo sham or aaj ki shaam aik jaisi hai faqat mera mahboob meray sath nahi hai, or yehi baat ronay ka sabab hai...

agar is ki dosray andaz say explanation ki jaye tu wo aisay hai (an other view of the shair) insan jab jawan hota hai na tu us may bari energy hoti hai , us ko bari expectations hoti hain bari umedain hotin hain zindagi may, jawani ki har sham aik umeed or expectation say bhari hoti hai k kal aisa ho jaye ya kal ko kuch aisa ho ga, but jb wo burhapay may pohanchta hai or us ko khayal ata hai k may nay zindagi kaisay kamo may guzar di hai jis say zindagi ka maqsad hasil nahi howa jo insan ka ultimate goal hai Allah ki taraf say tu burhapay ki sham may usay apnay kiyay pay sharmindagi feel hoti hai, khonay ka ehsas hota hai or wo pichtaway say rota hai k haye wo sham or yeh sham, waqat aik he zamana badal gaya k may nay zindagi ka haq ada na kiya....

i am open to critics but i hope somebody understand how to understand poetry in different aspects.

it's nice to have a different view on the poetry and I would say that none of these are wrong. Thanks for your contribution which is much appreciated. Look forward to more of your comments.

ehsan · January 1, 2014, 10:47am

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A great ghazal by a legend, Faiz Ahmed Faiz:

**gulon mein rang bhare, baad-e-naubahaar chale
chale bhii aao ki gulshan kaa karobaar chale

****qaffas udaas hai yaro, sabaa se kuchh to kaho
kahii.n to bahr-e-Khudaa aaj zikr-e-yaar chale

****kabhii to subh tere kunj-e-lab se ho aaGaaz
kabhii to shab sar-e-kaakul se mushkabaar chale

****baraa hai dard kaa rishtaa, ye dil Gariib sahii
tumhaare naam pe aayenge Ghum gusaar chale

****jo ham pe guzarii so guzarii magar shab-e-hijraan
hamaare ashk terii aaqabat sanwaar chale

****huzoor-e-yaar huii daftar-e-junuu.N kii talab
girah mein leke garebaan kaa taar taar chale

***maqaam 'Faiz' koii raah mein jachaa hii nahin
jo kuu-e-yaar se nikale to suu-e-daar chale *

ehsan · January 1, 2014, 10:53am

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Seventh ghazal by one and only Ahmed Faaraz, made legend by the mastero Mehdi Hassan

**ranjish hii sahii dil hii dukhaane ke liye aa
aa phir se mujhe chhor ke jaane ke liye aa

pahale se maraasim na sahii phir bhii kabhii to
rasm-o-rahe duniyaa hii niibhaane ke liye aa

kis kis ko bataayenge judaaii kaa sabab hum
tuu mujh se Khafaa hai to zamaane ke liye aa

kuchh to mere pindaar-e-muhabbat ka bharam rakh
tuu bhii to kabhii mujh ko manaane ke liye aa

ek umr se huu.N lazzat-e-giriyaa se bhii maharuum
ai raahat-e-jaan mujh ko rulaane ke liye aa

ab tak dil-e-Khush_faham ko tujh se hain ummiiden
ye aaKhirii shammen bhii bujhaane ke liye aa **

ehsan · January 1, 2014, 10:55am

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From one of my favourite poets, Mohsin Naqvi:

muqawwee123 · January 1, 2014, 11:42am

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mere ander ka hai insaan faqeeron jaisa

hybridkamal · January 1, 2014, 2:28pm

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:k:

muqawwee123 · January 1, 2014, 3:17pm

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koi nazm pasand nahin aapko?