meri 2 shairys jo mene KAL raat me bethke likhi thi.....

_Janu_Jia · December 23, 2002, 7:57pm

woh barish ki bondon ki awaz
woh tap tap kerta pani,
khidki pe bethke
apni zindagi ke kuch lamhey yaad kerti,
teri bahon me guzare hue wekt yaad kerti,
tujhse kie hue woh wade yaad kerti,
saath woh toofan bhi yaad ata he,
meri zindagi jisne burbad kerdi.

Dil roh roh ke keh raha he,
Yeh sadaain de raha he,
Ab tu aja sajan ke jeene
ki tamana nahi he ab hume

Dilsay · December 23, 2002, 7:59pm

Great ...

_Janu_Jia · December 23, 2002, 8:00pm

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Great ...
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thnx :)

Jaan_Lewaa · December 23, 2002, 8:21pm

jabardus:k:

Shikra · December 23, 2002, 8:42pm

very nice

_Janu_Jia · December 23, 2002, 8:50pm

thnx

BrokenSky · December 24, 2002, 10:29pm

very nice yaar!!
u got talent!! gr8 stuff!

_Janu_Jia · December 24, 2002, 11:34pm

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very nice yaar!!
u got talent!! gr8 stuff!
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thnx :)

Capricorn · December 25, 2002, 12:02pm

Re: meri 2 shairys jo mene KAL raat me bethke likhi thi…

Nice try Janujia. I appreciate your talent
Some technical faults:-

Ab tu aja sajan ke jeene
ki tamana nahi he ab hume

Phir bulane ka kia faida usay? And why smiling in the end?

arifnawaz1 · December 25, 2002, 8:11pm

Bahut khoob :k::k::k:

_Janu_Jia · December 25, 2002, 9:54pm

Re: Re: meri 2 shairys jo mene KAL raat me bethke likhi thi…

mujhse acha tum likh sakte ho tu likho