Main dil pe jabar kron ga

alirafaqat · September 9, 2007, 6:24pm

Main dil pe jabr karron ga tujhe bhula don ga
marron ga khud tujhe bhi karri saza don ga

yeh tareeki mere ghar ka muqadar kyon
main tere shehar k saray diye bujha don ga

hawa k hath bataon ga har tabahe main
tere shajar se parinday main urha don ga

wafa karon ga kisi sogawar chehray se
purani qabar par kutba naya saja don ga

is khayal mein guzri hai sham-e-dard aksar
k dard had se barhe to muskura don ga

buhat dinoon se mera dil udas hai
is ainay ko aks ab naya don ga

– Unknown agreesive Poet

Koyal · September 10, 2007, 2:40am

Re: Main dil pe jabar kron ga

nice one ali and welcome in poetry form if u really new :D

being_lonely · September 10, 2007, 11:47am

Re: Main dil pe jabar kron ga

khoob sharing

Jhanjharewali · September 10, 2007, 1:15pm

Re: Main dil pe jabar kron ga

i have heard a ghazal of attaullah khan along these lines as well and it was a very full-of-dard ghazal :
bichad gaya hae toh mae bhi usse bhula duunga,
maruunga khud bhi usse bhi kadii saza dunga.

a nice ghazal indeed.

Prince_Ali · September 10, 2007, 5:31pm

Re: Main dil pe jabar kron ga

lolz!

nice sharing.. Ali.
welcome to poetry forum n keep sharing

AQ · September 10, 2007, 5:34pm

Re: Main dil pe jabar kron ga

Ibtedaa maiN yeh ghazal kaafi takhreeb kaaraanaa laggi, go alfaaz kaa chunaao baRaa creative rahaa .. kabhi baY chaaraY parindaY uRaa diye kissi kaY jaisaY haathoN kaY totaY .. kabhi diye bujhaa kar WAPDA/KESC kee load shedding yaad dilaa dee…

I liked the ending:

bahut dinoN saY mera dil udaas hai
iss A’ainay ko aks ab naya dooN ga

Ends with a positive note :k:

tum_bin_1 · September 10, 2007, 5:36pm

Re: Main dil pe jabar kron ga

*Its written by Mohsin Naqvi *

Reall very nice

Thanks 4 sharing

AQ · September 10, 2007, 5:37pm

Re: Main dil pe jabar kron ga

aah.... Mohsin Naqvi..

No wonder :)

alirafaqat · September 10, 2007, 6:58pm

Re: Main dil pe jabar kron ga

naya tau naheen magar kafi dinoon baad iss forum per aaya hoon