maiN aaj hi ji looN gi bhar kar?

Arts & Culture Poetry ( Intikhaab & Sho'ra-e-Gupshup)
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maiN apni raah pe chalta hua,
meray saath meri khamoshi thee
ik ahat sun ke maiN choNka
shayad wo teri sargoshi thee
sargoshi maiN teray, ik qisa
kuch roshni aur charaghoN ka
kuch lamhoN maiN simti sadyoN ka
kuch aanay walay lamhoN maiN
dukh dard ka, ankh maiN aNsoo ka

kal raah maiN meray kantay haiN,
maiN aaj hi ji looN, ji bhar kar?

maiN samajh gaya har ik qisa
har baat teri maiN jaan gaya
par tum na mujh ko jaan sake
meri aNkh maiN wehshat dekh to li
par usko na pehchan sake
har aik charagh ki lo jaisay
ankhoN ko meri ab jhulsayaiN
meri aankh andheroN ki aadi
ab kirnaiN inko chundhyayaiN
meri raaH maiN kal jo kantay haiN
unki hi mujh ko aas rahay
har aik chubhan maiN lazzat hai
har aik ki dil ko pyaas rahay
pholoN ke lagaye zakhmoN ko
kantoN se maiN ab see looNga
tumko bhi bhoolna ab jo paRa
ye zehar ka pyala pee loNga.
(Black Mamba)

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maiN apni raah pe chalta hua,
meray saath meri khamoshi thee
ik ahat sun ke maiN choNka
shayad wo teri sargoshi thee
**
Khush rahoo**

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Thanks bhai. :flower1:

May Fate Smile Upon You.

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Bahut Khoob Lalay :k:

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very niceeeee .. :k: .. keep it up n keep sharing .. :flower1: ..

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Thanks Waseem bhai. :slight_smile:

Thanks GKK. :flower2:

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*unki hi mujh ko aas rahay
har aik chubhan maiN lazzat hai *

Zabardast...

BUT.. let me show this to Ur MOM ... ;)

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:smack: oye bhai why you forget ke Saamp maiN hooN, aaap aastin ke saamp wali harkataiN band kar daiN. :bummer:

and thanku :blush:

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aap likha karain, or atay jatay raha karain. :)

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is it an order or request? :snooty:

if a request, tau maiN kissi ki requests nahiN manta. :smokin: agar orger hai tau phir… :bummer:

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yeh poem the ? :rolleyes:..

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beautiful, so beautiful :k: mambay :queen:

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poetry samajhna tumharay bus ki baat nahiN, dimagh mat khapao. :snooty:

:blush: Thanku Sherruu. U think I am beautiful? :blush:

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its nice yaar :slight_smile:
bohot acha likha hay :k:

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Re: maiN aaj hi ji looN gi bhar kar?

[QUOTE]
*Originally posted by Black Mamba: *
maiN apni raah pe chalta hua,
meray saath meri khamoshi thee
ik ahat sun ke maiN choNka
shayad wo teri sargoshi thee
sargoshi maiN teray, ik qisa
kuch roshni aur charaghoN ka
kuch lamhoN maiN simti sadyoN ka
kuch aanay walay lamhoN maiN
dukh dard ka, ankh maiN aNsoo ka

kal raah maiN meray kantay haiN,
*maiN aaj hi ji looN, ji bhar kar? *

maiN samajh gaya har ik qisa
har baat teri maiN jaan gaya
par tum na mujh ko jaan sake
meri aNkh maiN wehshat dekh to li
par usko na pehchan sake
har aik charagh ki lo jaisay
ankhoN ko meri ab jhulsayaiN
meri aankh andheroN ki aadi
ab kirnaiN inko chundhyayaiN
meri raaH maiN kal jo kantay haiN
unki hi mujh ko aas rahay
har aik chubhan maiN lazzat hai
har aik ki dil ko pyaas rahay
pholoN ke lagaye zakhmoN ko
kantoN se maiN ab see looNga
tumko bhi bhoolna ab jo paRa
ye zehar ka pyala pee loNga.
(Black Mamba)
[/QUOTE]

very well Mamba, bohat achey, First time I got lil confused but the question mark at the end of the bold line explains it all :)

very well written bro. keep it up.

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khod ho gaye :halo:..

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Nope :blush: But I think ur shair is beautiful :blush: sachi :blush:

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Re: Re: maiN aaj hi ji looN gi bhar kar?

Thanks bhai. :slight_smile: waisay kahaN ghaib rehtay haiN aajkal? :hoonh:

Thanks alot chohdry bhai. Comming from you I will take it as a big compliment cuz you, yourself, are a good poet. :hug:

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:smack: koi iss ko iss adab ke forum se nikalo. :rolleyes:

:bummer: Sherni ko shair tau pasand aana hi hai. jealous honay wala emoticon

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Re: Re: Re: maiN aaj hi ji looN gi bhar kar?

idhar hee hain :bummer:

ps: itnay pyar say bhai na bol yaar, dar lagta hay :stuck_out_tongue: