hawaon k hath pegham-e-wafa kon dey ga
har roz aik naye andaz sey jafa kon dey ga
merey armano ka khoon us ki gardan pe aye ga
munsif hi qatil thehra to saza kon dey ga
jab ye teh hai k manzilen juda hain apni
bichartey samey mur k sada kon dey ga
dono hi dawedar hain apni muhabbat be misaal k
dekhtey hain pehley ik dojey ko daga kon de ga
jo tu hi na raha zindagi mein meri shamil
sada khush rehney ki mujhey bad dua kon dey ga
bujh jaye gi ye aag bhi bala akhir aik din
na milen gey to qurb k sholon ko hawa kon dey ga
faisla to kar liya rahen gey qayam kaisey
hamen itna hosla Aye KHUDA kon dey ga
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Rani Saheba...Khushbash,
Aapki Pahli Koshish achhi hai, ismain Rawaani Hai, magar meter aur rhymes ka khayaal aapko rakhna hoga... aapka qalam bara readable hai, isliye " Aazad nazm "
yani blank verse par zor den...yeh meri criticism nahi dost ki suggestion hai,
well keep sharing and Smile.
Darwesh.
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thx darwesh, aap ki batai gai khamiyon per dhayan deney ki koshish karun gi,
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khaamiyoo pe diyan de te hoi hi insan kuch sekhta hai
vese rani ji kosish achi thi
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buhat khoob title k hawaley se jo aap bolay woh main denay ko tyaar ho hahah nice haan bura mut manega plzzzzz
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buhat khoob title k hawaley se jo aap bolay woh main denay ko tyaar ho hahah nice haan bura mut manega plzzzzz
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thx sunny
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nice keep it up
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great
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A very very interesting and nice ghazal :k: Though I would like to paraphrase darwesh — just a little bit fine-tunning 
Keep you work sharing with us
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thx amal decent and mazhar
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bahut posting karti ho 