Ub is dil mein koi nahi:)
bohat din huay mein soi nahi
bus raaton ko ut ut kar roi
koi tau karay meri dil joi
Re: Koi nahi
tweety.. nice thoughts.. although I think the last line could be different to keep the wazan, qafiya, and zameen same for the whole "Qit'aa".. something like:
Kissi nay kee meri dil joi nahi
i know that the two shair ryhmes separately, but making it a 'qit'aa' will be much effective, in my opinion
again, i said all that keeping in mind that it is your own creation.
Re: Koi nahi
yes it is my own creation i've told u a MILLION TIMES
Re: Koi nahi
naheeN.. meraa khiyaaL hai 1.1 MILLION times.. 
aray baba… shaair kaa naam naheeN thaa neechaY aur phir Intikhab maiN post kee thee jahaaN doosraY poets kee selection post hoti haiN tau I was not sure naa 
sorry …
Re: Koi nahi
ok