Kaho kahan tak jao ge ......!

[abeeha]

Zindagi se niklo ge kaho kahan tak jao ge,
Hamari zaat se niklo ge kaho kahan tak jao ge,

Nigahon ke samandar main kinare ko pohanchne tak,
Koi jab rah na pao ge kaho kahan tak jao ge,

Kisi morr par kisi rah par jab hum se aan takrao ge,
Ajab si us kefiat main kaho kahan tak jao ge,

Had-e-nigah tak manzar main jab ik chehra samae ga,
Jhutla k jab thak jao ge kaho kahan tak jao ge,

Ghami ki larriyon main khushi ka ik moti piro kar bhi,
Jab andhe gham ko pao ge kaho kahan tak jao ge,

Sehra ki awara khaak nigahon main samae gi,
To bheege pal se bachne ko kaho kahan tak jao ge,

Jo mehfil ko pur shok goonjon se nikalna chaho ge,
Sadaa bas ik hi pao ge kaho kahan tak jao ge,

Chalo ye raaz keh dalo ye parda ab hata bhi do,
K chah kar hum ko toote ho kaho kahan tak jao ge !!

Need ur regards and comments:confused:

[Amal]

Re: Kaho kahan tak jao ge …!

@abeeha

Zindagi se niklo ge kaho kahan tak jao ge,
Hamari zaat se niklo ge kaho kahan tak jao ge,

Nigahon ke samandar main kinare ko pohanchne tak,
Koi jab rah na pao ge kaho kahan tak jao ge,

Kisi morr par kisi rah par jab hum se aan takrao ge,
Ajab si us kefiat main kaho kahan tak jao ge,

Had-e-nigah tak manzar main jab ik chehra samae ga,
Jhutla k jab thak jao ge kaho kahan tak jao ge,

Ghami ki larriyon main khushi ka ik moti piro kar bhi,
Jab andhe gham ko pao ge kaho kahan tak jao ge,

Sehra ki awara khaak nigahon main samae gi,
To bheege pal se bachne ko kaho kahan tak jao ge,

Jo mehfil ko pur shok goonjon se nikalna chaho ge,
Sadaa bas ik hi pao ge kaho kahan tak jao ge,

Chalo ye raaz keh dalo ye parda ab hata bhi do,
K chah kar hum ko toote ho kaho kahan tak jao ge !!

Need ur regards and comments:confused:

abeeha achi ghazal hey, thanx for sharing it with us

[bheegiyaad]

Re: Kaho kahan tak jao ge ......!

nice:)

[abeeha]

Re: Kaho kahan tak jao ge ......!

**shukriya ** bohat bohat ap dono ka,actually i am not a ripe poet thats y i really ur comments.

[Amal]

Re: Kaho kahan tak jao ge ......!

..actually i am not a ripe poet...

None of us is either. Not at least me.

....thats y i really ur comments.

that's why everyone needs comments. Yours also :~)

[GuL-e-Tasbeeh]

Re: Kaho kahan tak jao ge ......!

Very nice abeeha , keep it up, and thanks for sharing:-)

[chacha_Ghalib]

Re: Kaho kahan tak jao ge ......!

khayalaat achay hain, laiken qafia chooN kay bohat lamba rakh liya tha aap nain iss liye kuch jammi nahin...

misra'a-e-saani main aam tor par awwal hisay ka qaafiye say bilkul thora ya siray say koi talluq bazahar maloom nahin hota...
misaal kay tor par iss misray pay ghour karin
*K chah kar hum ko toote ho kaho kahan tak jao ge *
chah kar tootnay main aur jaany ki hadd main bazahar koi rabt nazar nahin aata.

shroo main koi aasaan aur chota qafiya ikhtayaar karin, baad main maharat kay saath lambay qafiye say bhi insaaf kiya jaa sakta hai.

jo mera khayal tha wo aap ko bata diya hai. iss main meri kam-fehmi ka bhi qasoor ho sakta hai laiken jo cheez meray dimagh main khataki hai main nain socha aap ko uss say agah karon. agar mera tajziya ghalat tha aur aap ko abhi bhi lagta hai ghazal issi soorat main theek hai to meri tarf say ma'zrat. laiken aap kyon kay nai shaera hain meri tarha aur main apnay liye ye pasand karta hoon kay log shaeri meri shaeri ka tajziya karin aur jahan koi jhool, koi kammi nazar aai mujhe uss say agah karin, iss liye aap ko bhi bata diya. umeed hai kay aap bura nahin maaneiN gi.

[abeeha]

Re: Kaho kahan tak jao ge ......!

really thanks for ur comments,such critical comments help me to work better.