Kabhi tou aisa ho - By Khanu

Arts & Culture Poetry ( Intikhaab & Sho'ra-e-Gupshup)
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Kabhi to aisa ho zindagi main
ke chupte suraj ke dhundlakon se
chamakti aankhon ki chilmanon se
bharaktay sholon ki hasraton se
khanaktay kaanchon ki anjuman se
Kisi dareechay ki oor se woh
Lapak ke nikle aur muskura kar
Ada se zulfain youn gira kar
haseen se lub, pankhari ke jaisay
daraaz gaisoo woh surmai se
mujhay kyon lagta hai woh ke jaisay
mujhe se barh ke yeh keh rahay hain
ufaq ke un dhundlakon se aage
shab-e-tanhageer ke bhi aage
jahan talak yeh nazar gai hai
wahan talak sirf tum he tum ho

nihan se khanon main apne dil ke
chupae rakha hai jis ko mann main
woh ajnabi sa hai ik musafir
nai si raahein jo chal raha hai
koi na jane hai rahguzar ko
qasad kaheen, kahan woh barh raha hai
magar yaqeen hai yeh us ke dil main
yeh kuch bhi hai, jo woh kar raha hai
usi ko paane ki justuju main
din aur raat bas ik kar raha hai

Kabhi to aisa ho zindagi main
ke jis ko chahein usi ko paein
ghamon ki shamain khushi ke manzar
sabhi lamhay saath hum bitaain
Kabhi to aisa ho!

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Excellent work Khanu :k: :flower1:
tou..kis ki yaad mai likha ja raha tha? :wink:

Kabhi to aisa ho zindagi main
ke jis ko chahein usi ko paein
ghamon ki shamain khushi ke manzar
sabhi lamhay saath hum bitaain
Kabhi to aisa ho!

:k:

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Jabardast hai… :k: :k:

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^jabardasti nahin hai. Agar dil chah raha hai tubhi tareef karein :p

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beautiful:k:

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Wah bhaee wah. Aap tou chaa gaey haiN pardner :D Waqai meiN it's really beautiful.

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nice :k: :k:

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WOW

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very well written with very well diction and very well organized and very well rythmic.

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What the HECK :eek:

FAINTS

This is absolutly fantastic writing yaar … u were mentioning u were in LOVE a week ago …now i m seriously beleiving that :hoonh:

Excellent work.

:bravo:

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very well written khanu bhai:flower1:

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aap tamaam bohate naik loug hain mashallah :blush: yeh main ne 10 minute main likhi thi mazeed impress karne ki koshish karne wala icon :stuck_out_tongue:

monasha: kisi ki yaad main to us ke ticket kataane ke baad likhi jaati hai. Abhi to main zindon par he likh raha hoon! :smiley:

Sehar: pardner…aap ki vocabulary kuch change hoti ja rahi hai waisay :hehe: Thanks

AQ: Four wells for me…kahin kunwain main giraane ka program to nahin? :stuck_out_tongue: Shukriya.

Atif: :wink: what do you know.

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Whaaaaaaaaaaaaaaa :eek: ??

Msn pe ayeh zara :smiley:

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Oh My My!!! :smiley:

yeh sahab bhi aagae :p…vaise mujhe shak tu tha ke aap main shair-o-shaeri kay jaraseem hain..aab yaqeen aagiya.. zabardast aur asar-angaiz talent :k: very balanced with true depth!

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^^dekhain deekhain mera mazaakh na uraain! :stuck_out_tongue: and jaraseem? :eek: jee nain…main rozana nahata hoon jee :snooty: Thanks.

monasha: main bhi aaon ga msn par :smiley:

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aha! i knew those leather pants were worn in order to impress someone :hoonh: :smiley: :stuck_out_tongue: :smiley:

Beautiful poem.

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Re: Kabhi tou aisa ho

beautiful :k:

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Dunno abt the “sumone” being impressed but he sure is Smitten :smiley:

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nadia: they were not…ammi jeeeee :crying: yeh nadia ki bachi mujhay tang kar rahi hai :mad: :stuck_out_tongue:

thanks dania

monasha: :expressionless: oh and are you sure of that? :stuck_out_tongue:

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Kiya rawanee payee hai khayaal ke uraan kee, wah :k: Its just wonderful and admirable. I am impressed :k:
I can read through the poem and between the lines as well and no its not necessary that I should have the blue print of ur mind to appreciate what you are saying. Words that you have used here coupled with their symmetery make it wonderful and enjoyable. True art lies in the enjoyment people get with the object you produce. Yours is wonderful :flower1:

Now some concluding remarks:-

You sure its 6/6? :stuck_out_tongue:

Apnee sehat ka khayal rakhiyega :smiley: