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Re: Kabhi ghum kee aag mein
she'e ke likhaaRii ne iskaa 'aks banaate huye she'r kii haiyat kaa liHaaz nahiiN rakkhaa jise yuN likhaa jaanaa chaahiye thaa:
**kabhii Gham kii aag meN jal uThe, kabhii daaGh-e-dil ne jalaa diyaa
-------------junoon-e-'ishq bataa mujhe kiuN tamaasha banaa diyaa
**yeh she'r bahr-e-sanglaaKh meN hai is liye dusraa misr'a Khaarij az bahr hai...tasHeeH farmaa lijiiye.
ONE short and ONE long syllable is missing in the beginning.
Re: Kabhi ghum kee aag mein
she'e ke likhaaRii ne iskaa 'aks banaate huye she'r kii haiyat kaa liHaaz nahiiN rakkhaa jise yuN likhaa jaanaa chaahiye thaa:
**kabhii Gham kii aag meN jal uThe, kabhii daaGh-e-dil ne jalaa diyaa -------------junoon-e-'ishq bataa mujhe kiuN tamaasha banaa diyaa
**yeh she'r bahr-e-sanglaaKh meN hai is liye dusraa misr'a Khaarij az bahr hai...tasHeeH farmaa lijiiye.
ONE short and ONE long syllable is missing in the beginning.
Kabhi Ghum Ki Aag Main Jal Uthe
Kabhi Dil ka Dagh Jala Dia
Ay Janoon-e-Ishq Bata Zara
Mujhe Kyun Tamasha Bana Dia
Gham-e-Ishq Kitna Ajeeb Hai
Ye Janoon Se Kitna Qareeb Hai
Kabhi Ashk Palkon Pay Ruk Gaye
Kabhi Main Ne Darya Baha Dia
Mera Jazba-e-Shoq To Dekhiye
Meri Bandgi Hai Wo Bandgi
Jahan Tera Naqsh-e-Qadam Mila
Wahin Kaaba Main Ne Bana Dia
Abi Kar Rehe Ho Tum Ibteda
Mera Keh Raha Hai Ye Tajruba
Tumain Zindagi Ki Hai Arzu
Mujhe Zindagi Ne Mita Dia…..!!
Re: Kabhi ghum kee aag mein
aapkii chaspaaN kardah yeh 4 ash'aar par mushtamil ek Ghazal hai...jis taraH se aapne yahaN yeh Ghazal post kii hai us taraH to is meN abhii tak 8 ash'aar hai jis meN radeef o qaafiyah kaa masalah dar-pesh hai. is Ghazal meN kam az kam ek she'r maqt'a missing hai [Ghazal meN kam az kam 5 ash'aar hote haiN ba-shumool matl'a aur maqt'a...sho'araa~ kabhii kabhii maqt'a musta'mil nahiiN bhii karte haiN].
maiN yeh Ghazal Urdu rasm-ul-Khat meN talaash kar ke yahaN chaspaaN kartaa huN, iA.
Re: Kabhi ghum kee aag mein
aapkii chaspaaN kardah yeh 4 ash'aar par mushtamil ek Ghazal hai...jiskaa kam az kam ek she'r maqt'a missing hai [Ghazal meN kam az kam 5 ash'aar hote haiN ba-shumool matl'a aur maqt'a...sho'araa~ kabhii kabhii maqt'a musta'mil nahiiN bhii karte haiN].
maiN yeh Ghazal Urdu rasm-ul-Khat meN talaash kar ke yahaN chaspaaN kartaa huN, iA.
yaar kabhi hum ghareebon kee urdu bhi bol liya karein shayad hum logon koh samjh aa jaye. :)