behar aur khizaan keye waket
seb rungoon meye nikheteye
bila-shuba mekhteye…
kaee shakoon seye
aisa rishta anmol heye inn ka
deikho, zara deikho
kaantoon keye yeye phool
keiseye hein khilteye
keiseye hein simeteye
Re: kaantoon keye phool
masha allaah.........good...dushi
Re: kaantoon keye phool
its nice..but try to write in clear words...
Re: kaantoon keye phool
kanto k phool! dichusp khayal hey g
Re: kaantoon keye phool
phhol gul he kanta kon he 
right, abeeha. i admire your zeal to always be critique-ing, only because
one of your poems, on which you inquired comment for improvement was honored.
none the less, i acknowledge your sense of commitment to partial appraisal.
its nice..but try to write in clear words...
dear Masoom muskaan, mashallah, of course Gul is a fragrant and inspiring flower as a poetess and a person. :>
may all be well, amen.
in general, thorns in lives could be all hurdles which brave people can overcome with Allah swt’s grace.