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*Originally posted by Muslim_Queen: *
Wow chodhry ... great thoughts....and put in even better words.
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thankyou MQ, apni terf sey poori koshish kerta hoon key ju feel ker rha hoon wahi kahoon, ess liye shyed Allah mian achey achey ilfaz zehn mein daal deit ahay...:)
thanks Koyal
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very nice chaudhry bhai
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Thank you Amir Bilal.
If u write it urself, then it is realy good effort
Keep it Up :k:
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Thank you Amir Bilal.
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u r welcome
jee yaarroo, i think i already have told tht its my very own poem. anyways thank you for ur comments
Chohdry Bhai.
This is your first English poem and it shows that you have got the talent.
English Poetry is what you are made for brother. Their are few technicalities in English Poetry, like syllabyls, the rhythem sequences, the use vowel sounds and liquid consonents, that you have to study about and you are a ready made Poet.
Urdu poetry is more restricting than engish poetry. So I think you should give more time to English poetry than Urdu.
I dont say that you are a great english poet. But you could be.
And dont blame me if you tried to become a great english poet and failed. Cuz I wont take the blame for that :D I am telling you what I think. And as a layman I can be very much wrong. But atleast you should consult some expert of the field. Thats my suggesion.
Take Care and Best of Wishes.
Very nice
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*Originally posted by Black Mamba: *
Chohdry Bhai.
This is your first English poem and it shows that you have got the talent.
English Poetry is what you are made for brother. Their are few technicalities in English Poetry, like syllabyls, the rhythem sequences, the use vowel sounds and liquid consonents, that you have to study about and you are a ready made Poet.
Urdu poetry is more restricting than engish poetry. So I think you should give more time to English poetry than Urdu.
I dont say that you are a great english poet. But you could be.
And dont blame me if you tried to become a great english poet and failed. Cuz I wont take the blame for that :D I am telling you what I think. And as a layman I can be very much wrong. But atleast you should consult some expert of the field. Thats my suggesion.
Take Care and Best of Wishes.
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thank you Mamaba bhai for such a detailed response. i sure will try to act upon ur advise. n btw most of the time i do poetry to satisfy myself.
thanks anyways.
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Very nice
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thank you Dilsay...:)
Its nice :~)
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Its nice :~)
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thank you Anchaal
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thank you Mamaba bhai for such a detailed response. i sure will try to act upon ur advise.** n btw most of the time i do poetry to satisfy myself. **
thanks anyways.
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If you just do poetry for yourself and not for others than meri jan, you should read Robert Browning.
He was something like this too. But he is too difficult to understan. No wait a min not too difficult he is three...no four.... no not even that........He is maybe eight or Nine difficult to understan. :(
Take Care
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If you just do poetry for yourself and not for others than meri jan, you should read Robert Browning.
He was something like this too. But he is too difficult to understan. No wait a min not too difficult he is three...no four.... no not even that........He is maybe eight or Nine difficult to understan. :(
Take Care
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:)
Mamba he's a great poet. wd like to share a poem n derrien nahien, inni mushkil nahien hey...:)
Life in a Love
Escape me?
Never—
Beloved!
While I am I, and you are you,
So long as the world contains us both,
Me the loving and you the loth,
While the one eludes, must the other pursue.
My life is a fault at last, I fear—
It seems too much like a fate, indeed!
Though I do my best I shall scarce succeed—
But what if I fail of my purpose here?
It is but to keep the nerves at strain,
To dry one's eyes and laugh at a fall,
And baffled, get up to begin again,—
So the chase takes up one's life, that's all.
While, look but once from your farthest bound,
At me so deep in the dust and dark,
No sooner the old hope drops to ground
Than a new one, straight to the selfsame mark,
I shape me—
Ever
Removed!
kesi laggii??
kisssi ko achi/burri nahien laggi yeh...????
:k:
thank you Prince Ali..
kia hova???
n btw azad jee, yeh aap kis pey confused ho meri poempey ya Robert Browning kee poem pey???