**
apney wajood ki aagahi ka ju dia tum
merey khyaaloon key taqchey pey sjja gye ho
aankhien us ki lou ko ik amanat ki terhah
apney khoon sey seinchti rehti hein
aur us ki madham aanch mein dil
geeli lakri kee terhah sulgta rehta hay
**
chodhry
:k:…
KN i feel like crying rightnow…
Bohat acha lika pa nay....
& :( too..
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*Originally posted by Swera: *
Bohat acha lika pa nay....
& :( too..
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thank you swera, bass kabhi kabhi rog paltey paltey inna berh jata hay key derd berdaasht nahein ho pata
very vvvvvv nice :k: and
keep sharin :k:
zabardast :k:
awesome:k::k:
keep it up and thanks for sharing:flower1:
thank you GKK, Vivo and HH
:k: chodhry bhai… Keep it up. 
Chaho to qasam lay lo … Hum nay koi dia nahi jalaya :nono:
:k:
Bohut Umda
EXCELENT
thankyou Mamba, Azad and amir
mein essey dobara perh rha tha tu ik aur terteeb lafzoon ki banni now i am 
kiss ko use keroon. kia khyaal hey aap logun ka?
**apney wajood ki aagahi ka ju dia tum
merey khyaaloon key taqchey pey sjja gye ho
aankhien us ki lou ko ik amanat ki terhah
apney khoon sey seinchti rehti hein
aur us ki madham aanch mein dil
geeli lakri kee terhah sulgta rehta hay **
-chodhry
do let me know which one is better. wo likha tha bohat spontenous ju feel ker rh atha, lafzoon pey zyada concentrate nahien kia tha es waley mien thoora so soocha hay. aur theme behter kerney ki koshish ki hey.
aur us ki madham aanch mein dil
geeli lakri kee terhah sulgta rehta hay
chaudhry this one is really cool as compared to the last one
that is an excelent aproach
so keep it up
Chohdry both are good but I think the second one is better than the first one.
Keep it up. :k:
BEAUTIFUL:(
thankyou ** smilly**
hmmmm…
thank you amir and mamba, i just pasted the newone in main thread.
kisssi ney nahien perhhi edited poem amir aur mamba key elaawa???
the second one is good too:k:
thank you GKK…