hum ne tujhe apna jeewan saathi maan liya
jub tu saamnay aaiya tau tujhe pehchaan liya
tujh he se shaadi ka armaan kiya
magar tu ne tau kisi aur larki ko apna liya
Re: jeewan saathi
good
sounds like shairi of Dushwari
Re: jeewan saathi
^ interesting that in a couple of days you acquianted your self with different poetry styles at GS.
Re: jeewan saathi
tweety bird,
rhyme scheme is not the only requirement of good poetry.
your subject must be strongly handled. these 4 liners need help.
regard for a partnership ought not to be begged.
did you get inspiration from my poem/s?
Dushwari
hum ne tujhe apna jeewan saathi maan liya jub tu saamnay aaiya tau tujhe pehchaan liya tujh he se shaadi ka armaan kiya magar tu ne tau kisi aur larki ko apna liya
Re: jeewan saathi
tweety bird, rhyme scheme is not the only requirement of good poetry. your subject must be strongly handled. these 4 liners need help. regard for a partnership ought not to be begged. did you get inspiration from my poem/s?
Dushwari
Dushwari, I like your poetry. I was happy to see that tweetybird is doing very well now. Her poem reminded me of your poetry.
Re: jeewan saathi
thanx for sticking up for me omer faraz
Re: jeewan saathi
thanx for sticking up for me omer faraz
You are most welcome. You have talent unlike many others here who think they are great poets themselves and write poetry with wazan.
Re: jeewan saathi
thanx