janoon ka safar

Azad · March 28, 2003, 10:15am

Had e Khwahish ke hisaar say nikal aaon
Hina ka rang teray haton main jo khil jay

Hay janoon ka safar bohut katth’n our taweel
Tu rakh day haat mere dil par keh dum nikal jay

Adab Arz
(Azad)

Gadha · March 28, 2003, 10:18am

kaam chor insaan:) janoon kaa safar tay nahiN kar saktay zaraa saa:p?

nice sher;)

adab arz hay:smack:

Azad · March 28, 2003, 11:28am

Esa ki sawari! haan na zara daikhain to … aab hum Esa to hain nahi

Dilsay · March 28, 2003, 1:35pm

Re: janoon ka safar

[QUOTE]
*Originally posted by Azad: *
Had e Khwahish ke hisaar say nikal aaon
Hinna ka rag teray hatom main jo khil jay

Hay janoon ka safar bohut kathan our taweel
Tu rakh day haat mere dil par keh dum nikal jay

Adab Arz
(Azad)
[/QUOTE]

Mashaallah... this is great.... please keep writing....

Azad · March 28, 2003, 1:46pm

Re: Re: janoon ka safar

[QUOTE]
*Originally posted by Dilsay: *

Mashaallah... this is great.... please keep writing....
[/QUOTE]

Nawazish hay Dilsay jee, mouft ke mashwaray ka shukria par humaray pass lekh'tay rehnay ki koi waja nahi hay na;
haan bhai 'mouft' say yaad aya aap ki dug dugi kaisi hay, kafi din howi aap ko rotay nahi suna :D

WiseGuy · March 28, 2003, 3:30pm

Re: janoon ka safar

Not bad, just improve your spelling mistakes, Roman Urdu GHalat likhi ho tu paRhna mushkil hota hai, waisay achi kavish hai, dono shairoN maiN wazan idher udher hai, keep trying, you’ll improve. Insha Allah.
:k:

WiseGuy · March 28, 2003, 3:33pm

Waisay aap kitnay senior hain,

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Koyal · March 28, 2003, 3:53pm

ye utnay senior wg jab pakistan azad huwa tah hai na azad

system · March 28, 2003, 7:15pm

boaht khoobsuraut hai.. :k::k:

WiseGuy · March 28, 2003, 7:56pm

[QUOTE]
*Originally posted by Koyal: *

ye utnay senior wg jab pakistan azad huwa tah hai na azad :p
[/QUOTE]

Pakistan tu azad ho gaya, kia yeh bhi huay keh nahee ;)

chand_chehra · March 28, 2003, 8:56pm

nice shairs azad gi :k:

HeArT_HaCKeR · March 28, 2003, 9:01pm

:k: nice one

NikamiJano · March 28, 2003, 9:02pm

Re: janoon ka safar

[QUOTE]
*Originally posted by Azad: *

Hay janoon ka safar bohut kathan our taweel
Tu rakh day haat mere dil par keh dum nikal jay

[/QUOTE]

v nice thanks 4 sharin

_Nazish · March 28, 2003, 10:54pm

bohat khoob :k:

keep up the good work (another muft mashwara )

ghazal_kisi_ke · March 29, 2003, 5:22am

bohut khoob:k::k:

Ps: aik baat samhaj nahi lagee:konfused:
yeh tum her sher yah ghazal yah nazam likhnay ke bad adad arz kion kehtay ho:bummer:
if u don’t mind and if u don’t yell at me then could u explain it to me:D

weteyes82 · March 29, 2003, 11:43am

good :k: keep the good work Azad sahib :k:

Janan · March 29, 2003, 3:55pm

Re: Re: Re: janoon ka safar

Ab dug dugi koi our baja raha hay our Dilsay ka saZina hum sun rahay hain … bachara dil say

Azad · March 31, 2003, 6:01am

Re: Re: janoon ka safar

Jaldi kay kaam aisay hi hotay hain

Azad · March 31, 2003, 6:02am

Kon???

Azad · March 31, 2003, 6:03am

Nawazish CC,

HH long time no c