Girnay say pehlay mainy, maanga tha ik sahaara
janay kion shuroo her teraf say sang baare ho gayee
chahray to Yaaroon kay thay ,per lehjaay thay ajnabee
janay kion Aankhaoon k agay, Dhund taaree ho gayee
apne muflsee ka taz’kara ik roz, Apnooo say ker diya
janay kion Dostoon per rafaaqat hamaare bhaare ho gayee
ik shaam jo ro ley hum khuaabooN k mazaar per
janay kion us k baad bayhisee hum per Taaree ho gayee
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: ( i m sorry ..yeh pata nahi kia ho gaya mujh say
is ko shora-e-gupshup main move ker dain ...
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If you would construct a debate around your creation , we could keep it here .
Otherwise the call is yours :D
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^ All views walay is ko ji khichree pakaain gay main us say khofzada hoon is ley behter hay k eyh apnay maqaam per hee ajayee : )
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achi koshish hy Pg....nd rhythm is also gud..keep it up
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hmmmm 
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khoob hai :k:
khayalaat khoob hain… wazan main thori kharaabi hai aik dou jaga per jo kay waqt kay saath theek ho jai gi
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shukriya jub ghaalib nay pass ker diya to baqee kis khait ki moolee hain : P
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lalooo khet ke moooli :p
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^ lallo khait main koi moole nahi hay naraz
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ap oder keb gae tehn :ASA:
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OMG !
tht is soo beautiful.. n sad..
the word choice was good
the rhythm was excellent
the concept was superb..
i really liked it.
thanks alot for sharing.!!!
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thanx for sharin