Re: i need revision. plz edit...
Howz this:
Holding a simple brown suitcase, an evil gleam shone mysteriously in the eyes of a 24 year old man at the gates of the Mosque. Relentlessly glancing to see if anyone was watching him, he silently walked into the Hurram with an insecure impression smeared across his face. He was nervous, as if he wanted to promptly carry out his task as soon as possible. Inside the Hurram, stood 300 devoted Muslims, praying in silent trance. He took the suitcase, and gently set it down at the back of the Hurram, his hands shuddering with anxiety. By simply unlatching the two ends of the suitcase he rampaged mass destruction, and along with it insolence, abomination and malevolence as well.
I corrected a couple of verb structures and substituted a couple of words... hope that helps. Ok back to my own paper :(