how would you finish it?

shab-e-firaq · July 12, 2008, 3:50am

jub say humaray rastay howay hain juda…

i already know what i want to put next but was just wondering what would you put next lets see how creative are you but plz ( LAKEER KA FAKEER HONAY KI KOI ZARORAT NAHI)

Dushwari · July 12, 2008, 3:54am

Re: how would you finish it?

my good ness, who are you telling this?

shab-e-firaq · July 12, 2008, 4:00am

uuummmmmmmmmm

X2 · July 12, 2008, 4:12am

jub say humaray rastay howay hain juda
traffic congestion bhi zara kam ho gayee

hsap · July 12, 2008, 5:02am

zindaggi kaa mazaa dobaalaa houney lagaa

Sajalina · July 12, 2008, 6:40am

Re: how would you finish it?

jub say humaray rastay howay hain juda

1- mai sab kaam waqt pay karnay laga

2- tab say hai dil kuch khafa khafa......:(

Wiseman · July 12, 2008, 8:31am

jub say humaray rastay howay hain juda

1- tab mei aur logon ko date marne laga.

Thanks. :)

Malik_Zulfi · July 12, 2008, 9:14am

Re: how would you finish it?

jub say humaray rastay howay hain juda
kask si hay dil main ay Rab kia hoi khata

moazzam.mbs · July 12, 2008, 9:34am

Re: how would you finish it?

jab se hamaray rastay howay hain juda
ye jan lay jan khuda daykh raha hay

AQ · July 12, 2008, 9:50am

I had to do some changes for tukk bandi in the first misra' - also due to the beh'r I found it necessary to be changed; I hope you won't mind...

So, here is my small contribution ... :)

Jub saY huvaY haiN raastaY hamaaraY Judaa
DenaY laggaY haiN hum sahaaraY ba-khudaa

AQ · July 12, 2008, 10:02am

hmmm... here is continuity of the ghazal... just came this one in mind :)

GintaY rahai thaY taaraY yooN tau tamaam um'r
Shab-e-Firaaq kaY haiN ajab nazaaaraY judaaa

Added:

One more came in.... (you hit my weakness :))

Go haiN aik hee dariyaa kaY ha'm-nasheeN
Par beh rahai haiN jaisaY kinaaraY judaaa

AQ · July 12, 2008, 10:47am

Naqsh-e-Ka’f-e-paaye yaar ki kuch na poochiye
Uljhan maiN josh kaY haiN sharaaaaraY judaa

Dil Dukh gayaa Anwaar kaa lafzoN kee choT saY
ThaY Harf-e-Dua maiN shaamiL ishaaraY judaa

laiN jee, ghazal hee poori ho gayee

kiyaa khiyaaL hai, kheNch kar phir dau-ghazla yaa seh-ghazla kiyaa jaaye?

Malik_Zulfi · July 12, 2008, 11:49am

Re: how would you finish it?

Carry on

shab-e-firaq · July 12, 2008, 12:39pm

Re: how would you finish it?

this is briliant AQ i almost dont want to post my version ,rest of u guys didnt disappoint either

Wiseman · July 12, 2008, 1:08pm

You didn't. :(

K337 · July 12, 2008, 1:59pm

nice thread:D

Sheal · July 12, 2008, 3:17pm

Re: how would you finish it?

jub say humaray rastay howay hain juda

kam aanay laga visa card ka bill mera

Wiseman · July 12, 2008, 3:47pm

You didn't. :CareBear:

shab-e-firaq · July 12, 2008, 5:13pm

umm i am giving it few days since it seems like u gys are bot done yet...

AQ · July 12, 2008, 5:13pm

baRa mazaa aa rahaa hai

I want to read your version.