Ghlati Teri Thi.....

Arts & Culture Poetry ( Intikhaab & Sho'ra-e-Gupshup)
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salam ppl…i wrote this yesterday and wanted to share it with you guys…please tell me if there are any mistakes…i dont write poetry alot.

tu sholay ko shabnam samajh betha
ghalti teri thi
tu meray hasney ko pyar samajh betha
ghalti teri thi
tu meray tabssum ko iqrar samajh betha
ghalti teri thi
tu meri haya ko ad’a samajh betha
ghalti teri thi
tu meri zulf ko ghta samajh betha
ghalti teri thi
tu bay’ceni ko intezaar samajh betha
ghalti teri thi
tu mujh pay apna ekhtyaar samajh betha
ghalti teri thi
tu meri aankhon ko samndar samajh betha
ghalti teri thi
tu mera dill ko mander samajh betha
ghalti teri thi
tu mujh ko apna hum’dam samajh betha
ghalti teri thi
gela mujh say na kar
ghalti teri thi
tu khezaa’n ko bahaar samajh betha
ghalti teri thi
punjabi kuri !!!

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very nice.... thanks for sharing

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*Originally posted by Dilsay: *
very nice.... thanks for sharing
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no suggestions on how to improve it?

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Wow very well writen yaar… :k:…as far as mistakes are concerned… I am not a poet …so dont know much about any technicalities… apparently It looks like a balanced poem..

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bohat achay :k:

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Buhat Khoob:k:
:flower1:…

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nice try :k:

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nice one but who knows k galti kis ki thei..:)
thanks 4 sharin PK

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:hehe:

thanx everyone 4 ur repies:)
aap logon ki zar’a nawazish hay.

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Re: Ghlati Teri Thi…

haa.n haa.n theak hai mien manta hoon ghalti meri thi :wink:
Lekin aap ko bhi tu mera dil rakhna chahye thah na :frowning:

lol

btw nice posting thanks for sharing :k: :flower2: acha likha hai
bas ghalti teri thi per itna zooor diya hai k mujhe tu gussa aa chala thah
agar ek line ki bajaye do ya 4 lines k baad ghalti teri thi hota na tu buhat acha lagta :slight_smile:

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:eek: :eek:

i do not believe you :snooty:

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Re: Re: Ghlati Teri Thi…

:hehe: thanx…hm…let me try out what u r saying:

tu meray hasney ko pyar samajh betha
tu meray tabssum ko iqrar samajh betha
ghalti teri thi
tu meri haya ko ad’a samajh betha
tu meri zulf ko ghta samajh betha
ghalti teri thi

hm…yeAH it does seem better…but i wanted to emphasise(sp?) on ghalti teri thi

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i dont care if u dont believe me:snooty:
sharara…u have got one talented sister;) be proud:p

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Re: Re: Re: Ghlati Teri Thi…

Ya this looks good :slight_smile:

and y u want to emphasis on Ghalti Teri thi , aap ki bhi tu ho sakti hai ,
aap keon hansi thi us ko dekh kar , aap ne keon tabssum kiya thah us ki kisi baat per , aap ne keon itni haya dekhai thi, aur aap ki zulf, keon khula chora tha aap ne apni zulf ko , ghalti aap ki bhi thi :slight_smile: ,
**Two hands required for Clap . **

anyhow good shairee mien tu bas aise hi apne dil ki batien kar raha thah :frowning: keep it up :flower2: , plz don’t mind anything.

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Its Nice.. Keep it Up.. :biggthumb

I am posting Your Idea.. and words in different Style :D
I hope U wont Mind

Its Dedicated to U :)

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Zakhmi Umar :hehe: nahi ghalti meri nahi thi…ghalti us ki thi jo dosti ko pyar samajh betha…anyways…thanx for the input:)

Golden_Scorpion :slight_smile:

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good try :k:

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Dekho umer Theek keh raha hai ......

ghalti sirf meri nahin thi tumhari bhi thi ................
so hum donon ko aik doosray say sorry bolna chahiye ok

First I say for this little joke .......

Anyways do not mind this bkz this is all to make others happy .

Hamari itni si baat say ksi kay chehray per muskarahat kay phool khil aaein is say achhi baat kia ho sakti hai.

Best Regrds

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Acha tu ye baat hai dosti ko piyar samajh betha oh no , chalo khair ek baaat hai waise aap ne koi aisa signal zroor diya ho ga jo us ki call mil gaye. baqi Allah aap ko khush rakhe aur aap k dost ko bhi dekho narazgi mien kuch nahi rakha khushi zindagi guzer jaye bas ye hi kafi hai , so plz be friends. :slight_smile:

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Good Aamir :slight_smile: , i like ur joke :k: you are right if we can bring a smile on our friends face then we are lucky and u r lucky boy. :slight_smile: