Forever...awaiting your awake

Arts & Culture Poetry ( Intikhaab & Sho'ra-e-Gupshup)
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This will be my 2nd attempt at putting my poetry to urdu as part of my learning to read,write urdu…
any constructive criticism welcome.


How does my life source live?
My soul does not seek for worry
.............of wandering the answer.

No matter my muteness,
 words are  carried,
.................... yet not caught.

What am i do to with forever walking floors.
...........awaiting your awake.

To think until the sun turns to shadowy darkness.

For I am as lonely as the lark
............ who sings a song of sadness.

Watch through the window as a shadow falls across my face.
.........do you dare to see the bead caught with colors..

forever falling....
..........like the third change in season 

when the leaves seek to cover the cold floor,
that one day  of old
..........I will lay underneath!

 11/08/88
christine S.(wazir)

now in urdu…
all ? mean couldnt find translation in dictionary..

aesay ? maen aabo daanah ghar basar karna

maen aatma ? mat DhuunDhna ba halkaan karna ka aawaarah al jawaab deyna

naa baat maen saakit alfaaz ? Dhona abhi mat giraftaar

jo ? maen ba ada karna baa hameyShah chhutti ki farSH intezaar karna aap ka bey daar ba tak Hatta keh al aaftaab baar ba mubham andheyra

ba maen ? jaesa akeyla jaesa al dil lagi

jo gaana gaana eyk gaana ka afsos

deykhna Khatm al dariichah jaesa eyk par chhawaan girna paar maen ja bhiRna

ada karna aap hemmat karna ba deykhna al do^a ? baa ranga rang

hameyShah tapakna

chaahna al saalis badal andar handin

jab al barg DhuunDhna ba chhaana al bey dam farSh ki eyk din ka puraana maen eraadah Ghaer peyShah war niichey

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nice Chris

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thanks SUNNY..

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WELL DONE Chris

here is my views about this poem, hopefully it wont be so hard for you to read

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, as for the meaning of all = sab

[QUOTE]
Originally posted by chris_wazir:
**This will be my 2nd attempt at putting my poetry to urdu as part of my learning to read,write urdu…
any constructive criticism welcome.


How does my life source live?
meree zindagee kese guzartee hai
My soul does not seek for worry
meree rooh kion pareshanion ko dhoonday
.............of wandering the answer.
jawabon kee talash main
No matter my muteness,
chahay kitnee hee ho khamooshi
 words are  carried,
lafz khood bol rahay thay
.................... yet not caught.
lakin kissie ko samajh na aee

What am i do to with forever walking floors.
aur kya keroon mai ab zameen ke saath saath ghoomna hai
...........awaiting your awake.
aur tumharay intezar main jaagne ke
To think until the sun turns to shadowy darkness.
yehee soochoon ke soraj ke raat kee gehraee main gum hote

For I am as lonely as the lark
mai tou aik akela saya saa hoon ab
............ who sings a song of sadness.
jis kee zindagee udasi ka geet ban gaee

Watch through the window as a shadow falls across my face.
khirki se dekhna sayaon ko dhalte ho apne samne
.........do you dare to see the bead caught with colors..
kya ab tum main himmat hai rangon ko dekhne kee 

forever falling....
girtee hoee zindagee
..........like the third change in season 
jaise ke aik aur tabdelee mosam kee

when the leaves seek to cover the cold floor,
jab patay girte  hain thundee zameen ko chupanay ko
that one day  of old
usee aik din kee zindagee
..........I will lay underneath!
mai bhee unhee main chupa hoa honga

 11/08/88
christine S.(wazir)

now in urdu…
all ? mean couldnt find translation in dictionary..

koee yeh kese batae ke woh tanha kion hai!

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thanks..sis..
that was quite a chore i know..
but my heart says thankyou...i really appreciate it...

may allah bless u..

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superb

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… for some us I know it is very hard to imagine the vision, swiftly sliding screen and sharp flashes from which a poet has to collect a large damanful of colours to create a rainbow like staircase which leads us to dome full of eachos…yes that dome is our heart which makes us feel like our whole existence revolves around our frozen shedows which makes us look the same doesn’t it?.

btw: hey did you notice the word damanful which is my mutated urdu…daman a urdu word and ful* is english as you must have noticed …

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if only late ghalab was alive he would not only slap my earz till they are red as heater’s rod but also cut my wrest to make sure I don’t do it again

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as i said earlier u are zee artizt

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***I dunno where I’m going. I dunno what for. But I’m making progress.