first time

Arts & Culture Poetry ( Intikhaab & Sho'ra-e-Gupshup)
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salam

zindagi mey pheley bar mey ney kud shayri likh ney ke koshies ke hey is liya zaror batey ga khan per galti ke hey :slight_smile:

      kis se kiya khaoon , mey kiya keroon,
      mugha kuch samjh mey nhai ata 

      sab ko hastey hastey kud he hasna bhool gaya,
      kese ko mugha hasney ka kiyal koin nhai ata 

      dosro ka duhk sun ney ke baad bhi,
      mey aupna duhk ko koin nhai bohla pata 

      ab ya dil tarsta hey kese ke mun se metheey alfaz sun ney ko,
      per koy is dil ke arzoo ko samjh nhai pata

      dua hey is kuda se ab mere, kushiyoun se bhaer dey her kese ka daman 
      koin ke ab mugha se kese ka udas chera nhai dehka jata.

aupney comments zaror behjey ga :slight_smile:

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Re: first time

[QUOTE]
*Originally posted by insan: *
salam

zindagi mey pheley bar mey ney kud shayri likh ney ke koshies ke hey is liya zaror batey ga khan per galti ke hey :)

      kis se kiya khaoon , mey kiya keroon,
      mugha kuch samjh mey nhai ata 

      sab ko hastey hastey kud he hasna bhool gaya,
      kese ko mugha hasney ka kiyal koin nhai ata 

      dosro ka duhk sun ney ke baad bhi,
      mey aupna duhk ko koin nhai bohla pata 

      ab ya dil tarsta hey kese ke mun se metheey alfaz sun ney ko,
      per koy is dil ke arzoo ko samjh nhai pata

      dua hey is kuda se ab mere, kushiyoun se bhaer dey her kese ka daman 
      koin ke ab mugha se kese ka udas chera nhai dehka jata.

aupney comments zaror behjey ga :)
[/QUOTE]

waleikum salam aap ne jo first baar poetry khud likhi hai tu bohat achi hai :) Mubarak hou aap ko aap ne itni achi poetry likhi hai aur wo bhi khud :)aur haan aggar aap khud poetry likhen tu shora e gupshup main likha karen jee :) Kush Rahen Allah Hafiz

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:k:

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hmmm That's is not bad....

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Re: first time

[QUOTE]
*Originally posted by insan: *

      ab ya dil tarsta hey kese ke mun se metheey alfaz sun ney ko,
      per koy is dil ke arzoo ko samjh nhai pata

aupney comments zaror behjey ga :)
[/QUOTE]

that is absolutely beautiful :)

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Nice effort insaan :)

I like these lines:

[quote]
sab ko hastey hastey kud he hasna bhool gaya,
kese ko mugha hasney ka kiyal koin nhai ata

[/quote]

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omg :eek: mugha nhai pata tha ke app logo ko pasand aey gi .

mazhar thank you mugha pata nhai tha next time idher he likhooon ga :slight_smile:

MANAN, Arsr, hafsa_dudette thank you soo much :slight_smile:

Rukhsarbibi chaley kuch to pasand aya clas ke mey behtey likhi thi teacher ko nhai sun rha tha :slight_smile:

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keep writing

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[QUOTE]
*Originally posted by ghazal kisi ke: *
keep writing
[/QUOTE]

kuch bata nhai app ney ke pasand aey ya nhai hones opnion dijey ga :) koy mistake hou to zaror bata dijey ga

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wow…:eek:

aap ne boht achaa likha hai bro :flower1:

keep it up :k::k:…

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thanks :slight_smile: how r u my twin :stuck_out_tongue: khan geyb hou nazar he nhai ati ?