Etna gahra tha rang-e-hina oos ki hatheli par

Pramod · July 24, 2003, 5:40pm

yun to maiN nazm bahot kam likhta hooN..magar ye meri eik puraani nazm hai..shaayad pahle bhii kabhii post kii hogii..yaad nahin..phir bhii aaj padh raha tha to soncha aap logon se share karooN…

Etna gahra tha rang-e-hina oos ki hatheli par
Mere naam ki lakeer oos meiN kahiN kho gayee
Main bhatakta raha apni taqdeer ki talaash mein
Aur meri bebas taqdeer oos hatheli par hi so gayee

Wo rang chha gaye meri ankhoN meiN baadloN ki tarah
Mere jazbaat ashqoN meiN badal gaye
Mere ehsaas ne dhaal diya enheiN boondoN meiN
aur kal shab eik saba ke jhonKe mein bah gaye

haaN ! magar rang tha oosi hina ka
jo meri taqdeer ko kha gayee
aur aaj lahoo ban ke
meri aankhoN ko rula gayee.

By Pramod

Asif · July 24, 2003, 5:52pm

v nice prem ji :)
bahut khoob nazm kehi hai aap ne...

Muslim_Queen · July 24, 2003, 6:23pm

Aww its beautiful

_Passionate · July 24, 2003, 8:12pm

beautiful :~)

Koyal · July 24, 2003, 8:43pm

nice one pram jee..:)

Pramod · July 24, 2003, 9:25pm

nazm pasand karne aur honsla afzaai ke liye bahot bahot shukriya
** Asif, MQ.&Passionate and Koyal. **

Amal · July 25, 2003, 12:50pm

I guess pehley bhi parrhi hey ye nazm. Good try Pramod. Never miss a
chance to write a nazm for nazms give you more liberty to express yourself. Bas
bohat ziaada nazmeiN bhi mat likhna warna phir ghazal nahi likh paao ge :~) Make
a good balance of it and keep it up:)

chand_chehra · July 25, 2003, 3:53pm

very nice pramod gi :k:

_Nazish · July 25, 2003, 4:07pm

Nice :-)

ASA · July 25, 2003, 4:53pm

ahaa… bouhat khoob… :k:

HeArT_HaCKeR · July 25, 2003, 5:31pm

boht achay Pramod bhaiyya :k:

Pramod · July 25, 2003, 8:24pm

[QUOTE]
Originally posted by Amal: *
I guess pehley bhi parrhi hey ye nazm. Good try **Pramod*. Never miss a
chance to write a nazm for nazms give you more liberty to express yourself. Bas
bohat ziaada nazmeiN bhi mat likhna warna phir ghazal nahi likh paao ge :~) Make
a good balance of it and keep it up:)
[/QUOTE]

Padhii hogii aap ne . shaayad main ne pahle bhii post kiya tha.
I will think for nazm now..in fact ! I will start reading few to get the rythem..
thanks ** Amal **

Pramod · July 25, 2003, 8:26pm

nazm pasand karne aur honsla afzaai karne ke liye shukriya ...Chand jii,~Nazish~,AsA and HeArT HaCKeR sahiba....

ghazal_kisi_ke · July 30, 2003, 12:26am

kia baat hai:k::k:
thanks pramod:flower1:

Amarbail1 · July 30, 2003, 6:12pm

Xcellent Pramod …:k:

Pramod · July 30, 2003, 9:12pm

honsla afzaai ke liye bahot bahot shukriya ** GKK and Amarbail **.

BeWaQooF · July 31, 2003, 6:27am

Re: Etna gahra tha rang-e-hina oos ki hatheli par

Wah Wah Wah :k:

**Yaar Itna Acha Likhtay Ho Phir Kam Kiyon Likhtay Ho Keep Writing **

Anchaal · July 31, 2003, 7:21am

bahut lajavab :~)

Pramod · July 31, 2003, 6:23pm

shukriya ** BeWaQooF and Anchaal jii **.