Dunya wale 2

Arts & Culture Poetry ( Intikhaab & Sho'ra-e-Gupshup)
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Last time u guys did appriciate my shairs
here is one more…

Apne hisse ki zindagi to jee chuke hum ab prince ALI
Ab to sirf dharkanon ka lihaz karte hein
Kitne bedard hein yeh dunya wale aakhri saanson mein bhi itraz karte hain.

 **Dunya bohot achi hai magar is DUNYA WALON se bach keh rehna** *kyun ke tum to jante hi ho*
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Nice.....

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Prince Ali ... can I just give you one suggestion i think if you take out prince Ali from the shair then it will sound better bakee achee try hai keep up the good work.

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:)

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:k:

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I think guest 777 that u jelous of my name

but dont worry i m not real Prince

      IN FUTURE :grumpy:  MinD Your own BuIsSnEsS
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ooops ....nahi nahi prince Ali jee me not jealous at all ye kya keh rehai hain aap that was just a suggestion anyways i thought when somebody posts something here they ususally do want other people's opinion about it and it was just constructive criticism don't be mad just be happy :)

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Prince, shair is very beautiful, magar mind if I made some adjustments? It reads more smoothly when it is in tempo… like so..

Apne hisse ki zindagi to jee chuke hum “Ali”,
Ab to sirf dharkanon ka lihaz karte hain.
Kitne bedard hain yeh dunya wale dekho
Aakhri saanson pey bhi itna itraz karte hain.

Hope u don’t mind. :flower2:

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man cool down:)
i think he is right just Ali will be perfect:k::slight_smile:
suggestion dena hamara kaam agay tumhare marzee:)
anyways beautiful work:k::k:
hope u dont mind:flower1:

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very nice though i agree with gkk and 7777 :)

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I also agreee… thats exactly how would have put it. ( if I had tought of it )

wese keep it up Ali it is a very good efort.

Plzz don’t mind… :slight_smile:

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Re: Dunya wale 2

[QUOTE]
*Originally posted by Prince Ali: *
Last time u guys did appriciate my shairs
here is one more......

Apne hisse ki zindagi to jee chuke hum ab prince ALI
Ab to sirf dharkanon ka lihaz karte hein
Kitne bedard hein yeh dunya wale aakhri saanson mein bhi itraz karte hain.

 **Dunya bohot achi hai magar is DUNYA WALON se bach keh rehna** *kyun ke tum to jante hi ho*

[/QUOTE]

Achee koshish hai...takhallus badal do :)

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Re: Dunya wale 2

{dor pichy ki traf ay gardishy Ayam tu}
Gup shup ky 17 (in 2003) sala Prince ka Jalal dykhiy jab kisi ny tasih krny ki koshish ki MashaAllah Future KIng hain Akhir:)
:barbie: ***Ye ada tab nahi sikhi thi:D ***

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Re: Dunya wale 2

Dykhiy os waqat ki atraditions thin Ya shai dSouth Habshia Abad ky shehzady k a rub Jan ki Aman paon tu araz kron ka nadaz ikhtiyar ki agiy ki akhubsurti or piyar hy islah main bhi subhan Allah
Tarikh sy main buhat kuch sikh rhi hon:slight_smile: