~Duniya fareeq ban gaee chaahat ki rah mein~

Amarbail1 · July 15, 2003, 6:47pm

Mushkil yeh aa pari thee hamaare nibaah mein Duniya fareeq ban gaee chaahat ki raah mein Aisa thaa dil ka haal tere baad, jis tarah Bhujhta huwa chiraag kisi khaanqaah mein Ek aisi kashmakash mein giraftaar thaa yeh dil Raahat sawaab mein thee na lazzat gunah mein Kitna mein phoot phoot ke roya thaa us ghari Us ne liya thaa mujhe apni panaah mein Haathoon mein phool, aankh mein aansoo leye huwe Kehtay hain woh bhi aaee thee mere beyaah mein Haan, tera 'Aitbaar Sajid' mila, khaasta-o-kharaab Kal shaam ek ujaar se jungle ki raah mein

[Aitbaar Sajid]

Dilsay · July 15, 2003, 7:34pm

very nice....

system · July 16, 2003, 4:06pm

Nice1 :k::k:

Black_Mamba · July 17, 2003, 5:09am

Re: ~Duniya fareeq ban gaee chaahat ki rah mein~

[QUOTE]
*Originally posted by Amarbail: *

Bhujhta huwa chiraag kisi khaanqaah mein

Haan, tera 'Aitbaar Sajid' mila, khaasta-o-kharaab

[Aitbaar Sajid]
[/QUOTE]

Great poem, the simile of Chiraaqh is a very good one.

But I think in the end, "Sajid" shouldnt have been included. Its distrubing the rhythem of the poem.

Haan, tera 'Aitbaar mila, khaasta-o-kharaab.

NikamiJano · July 17, 2003, 11:12am

Re: ~Duniya fareeq ban gaee chaahat ki rah mein~

[QUOTE]
*Originally posted by Amarbail: *

Mushkil yeh aa pari thee hamaare nibaah mein
Haathoon mein phool, aankh mein aansoo leye huwe
Kehtay hain woh bhi aaee thee mere beyaah mein
Haan, tera 'Aitbaar Sajid' mila, khaasta-o-kharaab
Kal shaam ek ujaar se jungle ki raah mein

[/QUOTE]

v nice thanks for sharin sis..:)

Swera · July 17, 2003, 1:56pm

Good,good as always:)

HeArT_HaCKeR · July 17, 2003, 4:29pm

:k: bohat achay