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Asalamaleykum everyone here is something that just came to my mind so i am posting it here, if it sounds stupid i apologise, if you can give me a few pointers i would really appreciate it.This is in a very rough form.
take care
salam.

“Kaash”

Kaash meh pathar dil hota,
Aur teri naam ki hoti dil peh lakeer.

Kaash tumsay pehlay marjatay,
Phir kamaskam tum meri kabar ko toh chujatein.

Kaash…kaash meh abhi zinda hota,
Toh tum abhi paas hotein meray.

P.S. i am sorry if it sounds stupid.

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Its nice .. But thoRi se Contradition hay Bayan haiN :D

Aik Jaga kaha ke.. Kaash maiN Tumsay Pehlay Mar jata

and.. Doosri Jaga Kaash maiN zinda hota....

Tou Make Ur mind na.... Wana Die or Wana live ;)

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hahaha yaar its very rough
just came to my mind so i posted it
still working on it hehehe
thanx for point out the contradictions
take care
salam