Do you write?

[SafwanR]

Re: Do you write?

@el_topo

Safwan,

In terms of advice, since you ask, I’d say it’s always a good idea to break stuff up into smaller paragraphs.
It contained some thoughts that I would have liked to see you explore further; you’re at an interesting junction with regards to faith and the questioning of it and I’d like to see more of the thoughts/conversations you have had with yourself about it all.
Technical aspect, there are a few odd word choices here and there, where it read a little bit like a translation. You could probably counter that by reading your words out loud and seeing if they sound right. Other than that you seem to know what you’re doing. Interesting stuff.

I apologize if I have sounded harsh. That was not my intention, I just believe in giving constructive feedback rather than just being nice nice, because that is the quickest route to improvement. I would want the same honesty in return.

Oh and I totally agree with the old pen and paper route.

edit; Saf, are you familiar with Thomas Pynchon?

Oh no no. No piece of advice is harsh. Actually, i appreciate you for being completely honest. I agree that there are some odd word choices here and there, but I’ve not been able to be online much to keep it up-to-date. It’s been ages since I last uploaded any of my work on internet. And no, i’m not familiar with Thomas Pynchon. But I just googled him. He seems to be a famous novelist. But i’m much more into Psychological and Psychotherapy rather then Fictional stuff. In my own screenplays, which I wrote, I wrote about life and things that are there and needs to be spoken out loud.

Have you got a chance to read any of Alan Watts work? You can also find his audio recording on Youtube.