Dil Ki KaiNaat

being_lonely · June 12, 2007, 2:55am

Re: Dil Ki KaiNaat

to naak kion chira rahi ho
achay bachay har waqt lartay nahi hain
lo aaj phool sahi kaantooon ki jagah

being_lonely · June 12, 2007, 3:03am

Re: Dil Ki KaiNaat

:dil ki kainaat ban jana or ban'na :
become a whole universe of my heart !

but

kitni mushkil se bani thi dil ki kainaat na pooch

it must be like :

how hard, heart's universe was made dont ask

rkopra · June 12, 2007, 4:04am

Re: Dil Ki KaiNaat

Thanks.

I've revised the last verse as follows:

Now I've nothing if I don't have my lover
How hard was it to build my heart's universe, don't ask

Does it now truly reflect what you meant? What about the rest of verses?

IS · June 12, 2007, 6:17am

Re: Dil Ki KaiNaat

aap chahte hain k loug tareef na karien is ghazal ki

ashi2007 · June 12, 2007, 2:18pm

Re: Dil Ki KaiNaat

chalo phool le leti hon

lekin

:nahnah: isse apne paas rakho

aur main kiddo nahi hon:topic:

ab yeh phool bhi tumhe he mubarak hon:bb:

_Moon_Corona · June 12, 2007, 4:03pm

Re: Dil Ki KaiNaat

nice

nakhan · June 12, 2007, 5:58pm

Re: Dil Ki KaiNaat

Main kuch na kahooN or chahoN k meri baat…
samajh gaey bhai sahab???

Pasand apni apni khayal apna apna… her banday ki apni soch hoti hay mumkin hay jesay tum sochtay ho wesay dosra na sochta ho isliye ye bhi zarori nahi k ye ghazal sub ko he pasand aey, is liye no zoor no zabardast or agar koi NICE bhi kahay to iska matlab hay usnay time nikaal kar tumhari ghazal parhi bhi or NICE bhi likha agar THUMB na bhi dikhata to tumhain kesay pata chalta k parhi bhi hay or pasand bhi aai hay…

uff kitna lamba lectur ho gaya…
wesay waqai achi likhi hay NICE & :k:

ashi2007 · June 14, 2007, 4:14pm

Re: Dil Ki KaiNaat

^^ exactly

samaj ai uncle lonely

being_lonely · June 14, 2007, 8:12pm

Re: Dil Ki KaiNaat

Khan Bhai i was juz kiddin around like this kiddo :p

ok samjh aa gayi missy :)