Please comment so that I can improve on my poetic talents or quit sha-e-ree
Kaisa masoom janwar hay yeh
rokhi sokhi khata hay,
hazaroon mun bojh uthata hay,
shikayat ka aik harf zaban par nahi lata hay,
malik ka wafa dar
khidmat par har waq tayar
insan malik ka kaisa na shukra
har waqt shikayat zuban per
malik ka na farma burdar
baghawat per har waqt tyyar
aww poor 