DeSi ThUg LoVe

PaKi_ThUg · January 4, 2003, 3:01am

This is my hip hop poetry a song i wrote…(i also added more..)
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You be my woman i be your man
Be my destiny from this day till the end
I have been feeling this you dont understand
It could be just us two in the heavenly land
Where we could be loving walking holding the hands
Look into my eyes the passion forever lies
The love everlasting they say that love is blind
I love you more than enything could you be mine

In the desert i wana be alone with you
Where it could be just me and only you
Imagin girl the amazingly romantic mood
Be on the footsteps of the lovers route
The ground be sand and the sky be blue
Allah be guiding us the whole way through
Like Adam and Eve we prove the love is true
When we first Began we were count of two
Our journey ended and we end up with crew

XChorniX · January 4, 2003, 3:14am

awwww dass so cuteeee

nice one :k:

PaKi_ThUg · January 4, 2003, 3:21am

Thanks. And i like your flag icon thingy!

XChorniX · January 4, 2003, 3:22am

hehe thanks bud, btw u new hea rite?

so welcome hea..hope u have loadza phun, enjoy

if ya need sumfin, glad to help ya out

pe@ce

PaKi_ThUg · January 4, 2003, 3:41am

aiet kool thanks!
Peace

chand_chehra · January 4, 2003, 3:56am

hummm nice :k:

keep it upppp

Azad · January 4, 2003, 4:30am

Welcome

PaKi_ThUg · January 4, 2003, 5:03am

Since this is my first time writing a peom could you guys help me improve and tell me what or how i shoul improve my hip hop poetry.. and could u also tell me if i m on the right track and my flow is ok or not.

Dilsay · January 4, 2003, 5:33am

Nice and welcome... keep it up

_Janu_Jia · January 4, 2003, 10:36am

aww thaz sooo sweet

PaKi_ThUg · January 4, 2003, 2:27pm

thanks…

arifnawaz1 · January 4, 2003, 2:37pm

Khush Aamdaid :k::k::k:

PaKi_ThUg · January 5, 2003, 4:24pm

thanks for all ya repliez