::: Deedawar kee Talaash :::

Gadha · October 20, 2002, 4:33am

AsSalaam-O-Alaikum:

here is one of my nazms which is in the “zameen” of Iqbal’s shair from his poem “Tuloo-e-Islaam”

Hazaaroon saal Nargis apni bay noori pay roti hay
barri mushkil say hotaa hay chaman main deedawar paida

please, any corrections are highly welcomed because I am not a shaair and consider my self a tifl-e-maktab…

“Deedawar kee Talaash”

Iqbal nay bhee kiyaa khuaab dekha thaa
Kay Muslim main ho Cheetay ka jiger paida

Nazar Uqaab kee, parvaaz Baaz jaisee
Ho na sakaa par chaman main deedawar paida

Najaanay aaey kitnay hee iss kay baad
Nigah-e-kargas liyeh, huvay dil-e-buuz paida

Baat tau kartay hain loug apnay aslaaf kee
Par nahin hotay kahin bhee Ibn-e-Qasim paida

Sunna hay kay har khuaab kee hotii hay taa’beer, Anwaar
Shayad kay ho hee jaaey kaheen Iqbal kaa bhee Shaheen paida

chand_chehra · October 20, 2002, 5:29am

wowwwwwww last shair is superb :k:
keep it up

hanie · October 20, 2002, 5:59am

*Sunna hay kay har khuaab kee hotii hay taa’beer, Anwaar
Shayad kay ho hee jaaey kaheen Iqbal kaa bhee Shaheen paida
*

marvelous,
eekdam marvelous!!!

love it…

GuL-e-Tasbeeh · October 20, 2002, 8:24am

Nice 1, keep it up &Thanks for sharing :)

nikii · October 20, 2002, 10:51am

veryy nice :k:

Jaan_Lewaa · October 20, 2002, 11:59am

Re: ::: Deedawar kee Talaash :::

bhut hi achay:k:

SunnyBoy · October 20, 2002, 3:21pm

Zabar10 :k:

Gadha · October 21, 2002, 1:00am

I just found one mistake in it and updated it:)

_Passionate · October 21, 2002, 2:34am

bohat khoob:k:

Dania · October 21, 2002, 6:41am

zabardast ..aap tou waqai bohat acha likhtay hain mujh sey bhee acha :)

ShaRaRa · October 22, 2002, 10:30am

not bad:)

NikamiJano · October 22, 2002, 11:28am

:k: nice one G.. keep it up

Capricorn · October 22, 2002, 4:53pm

Nice

Gadha · October 24, 2002, 3:49am

Dania: you mean tum bahut accha likhtee ho:rolleyes:

ShaRaRa:

NikamiJano & Capricon: thanks:flower1:

&Passionate: yeh “Thenga” kioun dikhaa rahi ho:teary1:??

Gadha · October 30, 2002, 4:01am

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*Originally posted by GuL-e-Tasbeeh: *
Nice 1, keep it up &Thanks for sharing :)
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thanks!

_Masoom_Muskaan · October 30, 2002, 7:36am

boht achei :k:

Amal · October 30, 2002, 11:24am

Re: ::: Deedawar kee Talaash :::

bohat umda Gadha jik:…barri zabardast
choice hey aap ki aur aap ki apni saheri bhi nehaet
pur’asr aur fikr’angez hey…lekin zara irsaahd
farmaiye ga ke is qadar sanjeeda tabiat aur zaoq ke
ba’wajood is qadar gher’sanjeeda nick (Gadha) ka
kya maqsad hey? Nick rakhney ke baad icon mila ya
icon ke baad nick ka khayaal aaya? I, however, bet
on the former.

GuL-e-Tasbeeh · October 30, 2002, 12:07pm

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*Originally posted by Gadha: *

thanks!
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You are Welcome:)

Gadha · October 30, 2002, 8:16pm

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**
Why did I choose this nick???**