Har roz ghar sey nikaltey heiN
din-bhar bhaagtey phirtey heiN
kon is ki fikar par karta hey
jaaney qismat meiN kya tey hey
koi bhatkey huwoN sey poochey zara
manzil ki dhun bhi kya shey hey!
Har qadam pe morr takartey heiN
hum daa’eroN meiN jo chaltey heiN
sab jaantey heiN par maantey nahi
ke manzil to qismat sey milti hey
dhoondney sey manzil nahi milti
hum phir bhi is paagal-pan meiN
kaheiN thak par beitth nahi jaatey
zara ruk kar saaNs nahi letey
kabhi murr kar laot nahi jaatey
isi paagal-pan meiN aakhir-kaar
aaNkheiN gard sey att jati heiN
paaoN lahu sey bhar jaatey heiN
hum jesey log hamesha sey
daa’eroN meiN peda hotey heiN
aur daa’eroN meiN mar jaatey heiN!
wah amal wah! What a beauty of thought. I must admire it as I alwyas. But dont know if I have read poetry after a long time or may be it really needs a second thought over first few lines of second para. Rythem seems to break there. Just the way I felt it. :)
I guess it is the third line of second para that’s not jelling well with the rest of the contents. Why don’t you suggest something chodhry? By the way, thanx for pointing out the problem
Nice theme... beautifully put into words... and yes... as chodhry already said... something seems to be missing in the first few lines of second paragraph... but overall... a beautiful poem with a deep meaning! :-)
