Critique this poem

Arts & Culture Poetry ( Intikhaab & Sho'ra-e-Gupshup)
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If I were you
and you were me
then you’d be me
and I’d be free

Is it worthy of being published? Where should I send it?

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Hmm. You can try your local paper or something online?

Cool Gals
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So you think it's printworthy? I think it works...except if the person being addressed is a convict. In which case I wouldn't be free, I'd be behind bars.

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lol. Well you know perhaps you could expand that? Its very short. Although at times a short poem can deliver the message quite well, there are dangers of it being too abrupt. So extend it to maybe a paragraph or so, and lets see how it goes.

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sounds like limerick..not a poem

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hummm

HOLIDAYS are no fun
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FACE OFF :D

I would be U and U would Be me... and... we would both me in Trouble :p

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Please dont add a paragraph, it would then make the limmerik a prose. Which is somthing a poem is not.