critical evaluation please!

*Hey everyone, this is something that I wrote in like 2 seconds today, the words just came instantly. Can you all please tell me wt ur feelings are about this? how did it make u feel and any other comments will be appreciated. Thank you. *

CONFUSION

When I think I have it all planned out, all mapped out, future waiting for me to take charge, grab hold…

All of a sudden you walk into the room and I see your face, feel your breath, hear your voice and that’s me swept away.
I don’t know how to move on; how to make this stop, I don’t know what I’m going to do in this state of confusion! And I know you can still hear my heart beating.

why do you keep confusing me? Why can’t I leave you behind? Why can’t I walk away, it was so easy for you, but it wasn’t for me here I am standing out in the rain.

I close my eyes turn my head and I try to be strong, I try to forget, try to pretend that I’ve moved on, I’ve forgotten and I’m all grown up, Bt I can still hear our song;

why do you keep confusing me? Why can’t I stop remembering, why can’t I just walk away?

I wish I could forget this, forget about you forget about ‘us’ but you know I can’t, thats why I’m sitting here writing this song.

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Sounds Ok!..

seems from the heart…:k:

It shows plenty of reason…

lacks rhyme…:slight_smile:

thnk you!
xxx