Ek taza aur sada nazm, sab doston ke liye,
enjoy and feel free to comment !
…BE CHEHRA !..
UJLE CHEHRE,
MAILE CHEHRE,
ZINDA AUR TABINDA CHEHRE,
PAZMURDA PATHREELE CHEHRE,
SACCHHE AUR SAJEELE CHEHRE,
ROSHAN AUR RASEELE CHEHRE,
KARWE AUR KASEELE CHEHRE,
SANJEEDA SHARMEELE CHAHRE,
CHEHRON KI ISS BHEER MAIN TANHA,
APNA CHEHRA DHOOND RAHA HUN…
BE CHEHRA - MAIN GHOOM RAHA HUN !!
darwesh !
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wow very nice
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*Kitnay such hay na yeh, aur kitni bari baat hay yeh man leyna bhee... *
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:k:
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NAWAZISH....
DOSTON HAUSLA AFZAI KA SHUKRIYA,
MAGAR CRITICAL APPRECIATION, WAH WAH SE KUCH UPAR HONA CHAHIYE,
PHIR BHI SHUKRIYA.
darwesh !
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nice one derwaish ap kab se shaa'er bun gaye kis ne ap ko sha'er bana dala :)
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hmmm...i think mere paas critical baat hai
aap ne itni bare bare alfaaz use kiye
they sort of went over my head
wese bht ache ashaar the
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isee ley kehtay hain apni cheezain sanbhal ker rakhne chaye takay dhoondna na peray :P
its really meanfull poem my fav one
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Doston....khushbash !
Koyal ji....Shair banaya nahi jata...poetry is inborn talent, han...Shair usko
apni mahnat aur extensive reading se....Polish aur Khoobsurat karta hai,
phir Waqt aur Halaat jitna Aazmaishon main dalenge, us dheemi aanch main
jal kar...Sher main Nikhar aur Joban aata hai...mujhe bhi waqt aur halaat ne
Sher kahna sikha diya, shiad aapki tarha...Apne shiree kaise ki ?
yeh sher apke liye !
" Logon Ne Bas Saleeb Ki Zeenat Bana Diya,
Main Cheekhta Raha Ke Payamber Nahi Hun Main
***** Muslima Saheba....
Sorry mere Alfaz, apke sar se guzar gaye... I never chose these words, It all
comes in a package...its called Aamad, they just comes to my mind, and I just
put it on paper, as it is...I do not change, anything, unless I see some mistake
in meter or rhymes.... so I am helpless, and once it is out, I have no claim over it, it belongs to you, the reader....I appreciate your honest criticism, and I thank you, for your interest... lastly... kiya karen...Urdu is my mother tongue.
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Koyal ji....Shair banaya nahi jata...poetry is inborn talent, han...Shair usko apni mahnat aur extensive reading se....Polish aur Khoobsurat karta hai, phir Waqt aur Halaat jitna Aazmaishon main dalenge, us dheemi aanch main jal kar...Sher main Nikhar aur Joban aata hai...mujhe bhi waqt aur halaat ne Sher kahna sikha diya, shiad aapki tarha...Apne shiree kaise ki ? yeh sher apke liye ! " Logon Ne Bas Saleeb Ki Zeenat Bana Diya, Main Cheekhta Raha Ke Payamber Nahi Hun Main *****!
thanks for sher chaliy waqat aur halat ne ne acha kia ap k sath kam se kam shari parnay waloon k leay wesay kia ap halat-e-hazara per tabsara kar saktey k konsay asiay ahalat se guzarna para if u don't mind:) ...me shaera nahi lakin shairi se bohat lagao hai ishq ki haad taak:)
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Koyal saheba....Nawazish,
Kis kis ka rona roya jaye...Halaat aur waqt ab purani baten huen....
Ab to aap Nazmen parhen, aur maza len, enjoy them and comment also,
magar Aap ishq ki had tak sher pasand karti hain, khud likhti nahi ?
Yeh kaise ho sakta hai.... Shaiyri sirf Halaat aur waqt ki sangdili se hi nahi hoti, waqt maharbaan ho, mousam ishq ka ho tab bhi hoti hai, yeh apni apni
qismat.....
Kisi Ko Ghar se Nikalte Hi Mil Gayee Manzil
Koi Hamari Tarha Umr Bhar Safar Main Raha !
Cheers ...
darwesh.