Ansoo

Arts & Culture Poetry ( Intikhaab & Sho'ra-e-Gupshup)
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Kab tak you Ansoo bahane behto ge, kab tak you udaas sa chehra leke behto ge…woh waqt tha jo beht gaiya ab uska kya gam hai…ansoo to tumaare jo gire unpe kya iska ghum hai…wafai nah kar sake woh…unke bewafai ka ghum hai…ansoo jo bahane behte to yaad unke ahhe…dil se yaad kiya to sawahe yaado ke kuch nah aya…woh ik kaghaz tha jispe kuch nahe likh sakha gaiya…khehna tha bohot kuch magar kuch nahe keh saka…ansoo he to bus reh gaiye hai…aur haath kuch nahe reh saka…us waqt tak ansoo bahe gay…jiswaqt unka aur mera samna hoga.

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Re: Ansoo

**Kab tak you Ansoo bahane behto ge, **
kab tak you udaas sa chehra leke behto ge
woh waqt tha jo beht gaiya ab uska kya gam hai
ansoo to tumaare jo gire unpe kya iska ghum hai
wafai nah kar sake woh
unke bewafai ka ghum hai
ansoo jo bahane behte to yaad unke ahhe
dil se yaad kiya to sawahe yaado ke kuch nah aya
woh ik kaghaz tha jispe kuch nahe likh sakha gaiya
khehna tha bohot kuch magar kuch nahe keh saka
ansoo he to bus reh gaiye hai
aur haath kuch nahe reh saka
us waqt tak ansoo bahe gay
jiswaqt unka aur mera samna hoga

Very Nice… :flower1:

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Re: Ansoo

^ thanks yaar

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Re: Ansoo

You are Most Welcome :)

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Re: Ansoo

Thanks...what do u think about it?

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Re: Ansoo

:)

Wat I think of it.... Hummmmm

GOOD poetry is.... The Combination of Both IDEA as well as the Technical stuff like (Qafia, Radeef etc)

For me... IDEA Is more important.... If some Pome has a good Idea... I will like it regardless of it has the othre Technical Beauties or not...

So..... Your Poem is Very Nice..... HaaN.... Rawani BUhut kam hai iss miaN... I mean.. when U read it.... it Gives you SPEED BREAKERS :D .... Just try to remove those.... :)

I hope U wont mind my Criticism :)

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Re: Ansoo

:k:

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thanks...for the advice

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bhai GS ki tarah humain mushkil cheezon ka to pata hi nahi, aap ki baat samjh main anay wali hay .... kafi hay

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Re: Ansoo

nice dum_mast:k: