An author among us

TlGER · January 26, 2015, 3:30pm

Re: An author among us

YES, KINDLE!

TlGER · January 26, 2015, 3:33pm

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Ye noon sy nuqta kyon dala hai sirf?

Sharam a rahi hai?

Pochna chah rahy hain kuch mujh say? :)

TS · January 26, 2015, 8:32pm

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Agar aisi baat hai to phir aap English main kaisay likhtay hain ?

BTW, who wrote the book description ?
There is this line “They marooned him in a Godforsaken place – a place from where no one could ever escaped.”

‘Could’ and ‘escaped’ can’t be used together in a sentence (unless you have the word ‘have’ in between).
That is a basic grammar error.
Also I don’t know if I have seen the word godforsaken with a capital G before.

I haven’t read the book or a sample of your writing but did you have an editor for your book ?

Also, have you written before ? Like articles, short-stories etc ?

I don’t mean to give you a hard time, and I may be presuming too much from the book description, but if there are grammar errors or other language usage issues in the book, it will not do well.

TS · January 26, 2015, 8:44pm

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Also, I see problems with the last two sentences in the following.

About the Author

            Leaving his construction business, he is fully devoted to his  writing journey. Instead of making big, strong buildings, he finds  happiness in making small houses of clay.  A current resident of Lahore,  Pakistan, Waheed Ibn-e-Musa also paintings and writes poetry, in  addition to his stories.

TlGER · January 26, 2015, 9:19pm

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Agar aisi baat hai to phir aap English main kaisay likhtay hain ?

BTW, who wrote the book description ?
There is this line “They marooned him in a Godforsaken place – a place from where no one could ever escaped.”

‘Could’ and ‘escaped’ can’t be used together in a sentence (unless you have the word ‘have’ in between).
That is a basic grammar error.
Also I don’t know if I have seen the word godforsaken with a capital G before.

I haven’t read the book or a sample of your writing but did you have an editor for your book ?

Also, have you written before ? Like articles, short-stories etc ?

I don’t mean to give you a hard time, and I may be presuming too much from the book description, but if there are grammar errors or other language usage issues in the book, it will not do well.

The Chicago Manual of Style recommends that “like all proper nouns, the names of the one supreme God as well as the names of other deities are capitalized.”

Dear, save the rest for tomorrow..abhi light jany lagi

Godforsaken - Abandoned by God

TlGER · January 27, 2015, 1:35am

Re: An author among us

Swiss voters 'back ban on building of minarets'

Agar aisi baat hai to phir aap English main kaisay likhtay hain ?

BTW, who wrote the book description ?
There is this line “They marooned him in a Godforsaken place – a place from where no one could ever escaped.”

‘Could’ and ‘escaped’ can’t be used together in a sentence (unless you have the word ‘have’ in between).
That is a basic grammar error.
Also I don’t know if I have seen the word godforsaken with a capital G before.

I haven’t read the book or a sample of your writing but did you have an editor for your book ?

Also, have you written before ? Like articles, short-stories etc ?

I don’t mean to give you a hard time, and I may be presuming too much from the book description, but if there are grammar errors or other language usage issues in the book, it will not do well.

**
**** Godforsaken **

There is no definitive rule for capitalisation of Godforsaken*; and when there is no rule, we use our rules. It is up to the writer’s belief that if he thinks there is only one supreme God.*

In this context, however, the reference to God is rather casual, and there are those who would deny that such phrases refer to the one supreme God at all. Lowercasing God in such phrases is an attempt to obscure the reference to God.**

No stylebook clarifies the capitalisation rule for Godforsaken. Even CMOS allows you to write both ways. Here we come up with our own beliefs.

I think, you assumed that I was ignorant of the importance of capitalisation.

P.S. Writers sometimes do fragments deliberately according to the demand of the context, and you cannot say that the writer made an error. Now don’t tell me you pointed out some fragment sentences to any author.

Let’s play a game?

You only have to write two simple sentences (scenes) in English. As I cannot explain you a scene, I’m going to write it for you in Urdu. ****

***Very simple: ***

1- Akbar office mein kursi par betha kaam kar raha tha. Sania dinning table k peechay kursi pr bethi Akbar k baray mein soch rahi thi.

2- Aftaab dheray dheray siRhiyan utar raha tha.

TlGER · January 27, 2015, 1:56am

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TS:

Also, I see problems with the last two sentences in the following.

About the Author

            Leaving his construction business, he is fully devoted to his  writing journey. Instead of making big, strong buildings, he finds  happiness in making small houses of clay.  A current resident of Lahore,  Pakistan, Waheed Ibn-e-Musa also paintings and writes poetry, in  addition to his stories.

Can you point it out for me? :)

TS · January 27, 2015, 3:57am

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TlGER:

** Godforsaken **

There is no definitive rule for capitalisation of Godforsaken; and when there is no rule, we use our rules. It is up to the writer’s belief that if he thinks there is only one supreme God.

In this context, however, the reference to God is rather casual, and there are those who would deny that such phrases refer to the one supreme God at all. Lowercasing God in such phrases is an attempt to obscure the reference to God.

No stylebook clarifies the **capitalisation* rule for Godforsaken. Even CMOS allows you to write both ways. Here we come up with our own beliefs.*

I think, you assumed that I was ignorant of the importance of **capitalisation.

P.S. Writers sometimes do fragments deliberately according to the demand of the context, and you cannot say that the writer made an error. Now don’t tell me you pointed out some fragment sentences to any author.

Let’s play a game?

You only have to write two simple sentences (scenes) in English. As I cannot explain you a scene, I’m going to write it for you in Urdu. :)

**Very simple: **

1- Akbar office mein kursi par betha kaam kar raha tha. Sania **dinning* table k peechay kursi pr bethi Akbar k baray mein soch rahi thi.*

2- Aftaab dheray dheray siRhiyan utar raha tha.

:)

I am not a writer so I am not going to try. Plus I am too lazy to do that.

But I found a spelling error. Please see the word in bold and underline.
The correct word is 'dining'.

'Godforsaken', I understand is debatable on various grounds.
That was not the bigger issue.
But the grammar error was more egregious and unacceptable.

Besides, if you are more comfortable in Urdu, maybe you should write your books in Urdu and then have them translated in different languages like Sindhi and English by other people, like Muqawwee123. :D

TS · January 27, 2015, 4:16am

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It is a little difficult to explain. I am sure others can do a better job here. There are a LOT of good writers of English here, mostly the non-resident Pakistanis and Indians. I think that is because they read a LOT.

But what do you mean by "making small houses of clay" ?
Are you trying to be poetic here ?
This should just be a list of factual information.

In the last sentence, 'also paintings' is not an action word like 'writes'.
It should say 'paints'.
Even with that fix, the last bit 'in addition to his stories' sounds a little awkward.
You could say '... also paints and writes poetry and stories'.
Or '... also paints and writes poetry, in addition to writing his stories'.

Besides, if somebody cannot see these errors and has to ask, it raises the question whether they have the necessary command over the language that they are writing, and publishing a full-length novel, in.

Please see that all of this assumes that you have written the sentences we are discussing.

muqawwee123 · January 27, 2015, 5:09am

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TS tumhe khuda pooche. You grammar nazi

TS · January 27, 2015, 7:24am

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When is your English novel coming out ?

muqawwee123 · January 27, 2015, 7:54am

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Don’t get excited. I’ll not appoint you my editor

TS · January 27, 2015, 8:11am

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I’ll give you a discount.

Par rehnay do, saaray ka saara novel hi dobaara likhna paRay ga. Just joking.

muqawwee123 · January 27, 2015, 8:27am

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samajh main aae ga to re-write karo ge na

TS · January 27, 2015, 8:39am

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Sola aanay Theek kaha.

muqawwee123 · January 27, 2015, 8:50am

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maine kabhi kisi ko apne ‘kooRh magaz’ hone per itna khush hote nahin dekha lulz](http://www.paklinks.com/gs/usertag.php?do=list&action=hash&hash=Lulz)

muqawwee123 · January 27, 2015, 5:13pm

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your first assignment

http://www.paklinks.com/gs/blogs/zareenkhan/122151-good-grammer.html

TS · January 27, 2015, 5:48pm

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Why don't you present yourself as the expert and find out what her problem is and then ask anyone here ? :)

muqawwee123 · January 27, 2015, 5:50pm

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I don't think I'm so good at grammar to brag like you :p

TlGER · January 27, 2015, 6:48pm

Re: An author among us

Swiss voters 'back ban on building of minarets'

Agar aisi baat hai to phir aap English main kaisay likhtay hain ?

BTW, who wrote the book description ?
There is this line “They marooned him in a Godforsaken place – a place from where no one could ever escaped.”

‘Could’ and ‘escaped’ can’t be used together in a sentence (unless you have the word ‘have’ in between).
That is a basic grammar error.
Also I don’t know if I have seen the word godforsaken with a capital G before.

I haven’t read the book or a sample of your writing but did you have an editor for your book ?

Also, have you written before ? Like articles, short-stories etc ?

I don’t mean to give you a hard time, and I may be presuming too much from the book description, but if there are grammar errors or other language usage issues in the book, it will not do well.

Swiss voters 'back ban on building of minarets'

It is a little difficult to explain. I am sure others can do a better job here. There are a LOT of good writers of English here, mostly the non-resident Pakistanis and Indians. I think that is because they read a LOT.

But what do you mean by “making small houses of clay” ?
Are you trying to be poetic here ?
This should just be a list of factual information.

In the last sentence, ‘also paintings’ is not an action word like ‘writes’.
It should say ‘paints’.
Even with that fix, the last bit ‘in addition to his stories’ sounds a little awkward.
You could say ‘… also paints and writes poetry and stories’.
Or ‘… also paints and writes poetry, in addition to writing his stories’.

Besides, if somebody cannot see these errors and has to ask, it raises the question whether they have the necessary command over the language that they are writing, and publishing a full-length novel, in.

Please see that all of this assumes that you have written the sentences we are discussing.

It is not about writing skills, as we are talking about grammar here. Accept the challenge.

It is the dinNing table for ‘Desi Khanas’. Dining table is for ‘Valaity Khanas’.

Spelling errors are not a big deal. Every bestseller has them. Ask any editor, and they will tell you about it. They will also tell you about their grammar mistakes. By the grace of God, I don’t have any grammatical and spelling errors in my novel.

As you can see, I wrote the scene in Urdu and did not care about the spelling error. Do you think it did not highlight it as an error? It pointed it out for me as a spelling mistake, but I let it go. You might only have one platform to show your abilities and skills, but I have others to deal with. I don’t care while posting in a forum.

I have only two mistakes in my description, and I always knew about it. There is a reason behind the mistakes. Here is the proof of my correction in the following links, where I changed paintings into paints. Don’t forget to check the dates of my press releases.

Pakistan’s First International Thriller Author Waheed Ibne Musa Debuts with a Stunning Thriller: “Johnny Fracture”

Waheed Ibne Musa Debuts With JOHNNY FRACTURE

Pakistan’s First International Thriller Author Waheed Ibne Musa Debuts with a Stunning Thriller: “Johnny Fracture” | Social Newsroom of Author

When the PR came to me, I approved it after making the corrections. I think I also corrected it on Goodreads. The problem is that the novel has been published, and I cannot re-publish it just because of these two minor errors. I will have to wait for my next edition. However, I have been changing it on many other forums, as there is not only one place showing my novel’s description. It will take some time. Thank you for pointing out that the issues appeared on Amazon, as I was unaware that they are still showing the old description. (My publishers forwarded them the material from my novel’s back cover)

Why did this happen in the first place?

These two mistakes were caused by copying and pasting the material from an old unedited file, as I had lost my edited file, which was without any error.

**1- **The sentence in the old file was something (no one has ever escaped), and I changed has into could but forgot to change ‘escaped’. Because of the Em-dash, Microsoft Word did not point out the error, and I did not realise it.

2- I have no part in the 'About the author’. It contained only the material provided by me. However, when it came back to me for proofreading, I removed does** from paintings but could not see the further issue.

I realised both mistakes after submitting the manuscript, but it was too late. The novel has been published.

I wonder if you really think that I was unaware of my two mistakes. I am very thankful to you and appreciate that you pointed it out for me. Amazon really matters to me, and I will do something about it.

I gave you 326 pages to judge me by, now give me a reason to judge your skills. Be a man and accept the challenge!

(Although my skills are creative writing, producing ideas, not editing)