AIK SHAR

babri · May 1, 2007, 7:06pm

Aansuon ko bohut samjhaya ke yun na aya karo,
mehfil mein hamara mazaak na uraya karo,
is par aansu bole mehfil mein tumhe
akela paate hain isliye chale aate hain .

SunnyBoy · May 1, 2007, 7:37pm

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:k:

deep_ocean · May 2, 2007, 4:27am

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:k:

Dushwari · May 2, 2007, 12:13pm

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nice thought in this four liner poem.

adding here,

ansoon boleye,
tum akaileye ho, tum neye bataya nahee
tum door kyoon gayee, tum bhi pareshan ho
iss baat ko chupaya na karo
iss liyeye, dil aur dimagh seye kaam lo
apneye sathee seye kaho,
mhefil meye ubb aya na karo.
udas, pashemaan ho zaroor,
bey-lows ehsas-e-tanafuz ko juthlaya na karo
kabhi aisee subh ho, aik mubarek...
tow tum chalteye aao zaroor,
azmaa lo zaroor,
laikin, setcheye rishtoon seye
ghebraya na karo!
-dushwari

ASA · May 2, 2007, 12:37pm

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^
O’ dewani
apnay naino k ye mouti,
aik he bar maiN mujh ko day day…
maiN in sab ko, chun kar apnay haatoN maiN,
dukh ke kali chadar per youN TankoNga,
taary ye ban jayNgay…

ASA

moonmine · May 2, 2007, 2:04pm

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babri · May 2, 2007, 5:14pm

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thanks all of you.

_MuNiYa · May 2, 2007, 5:43pm

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nice

Dushwari · May 3, 2007, 1:02pm

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AsSweetAs,

a nice poem & good metaphors

best,

dushwari

ASA · May 3, 2007, 1:07pm

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thanks…

will send you complete version sometime… :k: