aik shair

Arts & Culture Poetry ( Intikhaab & Sho'ra-e-Gupshup)
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this is ma first ever rubaai ppl…
EDIT:

hijar ki dhoop main tera khayal meray saath raha
bhala saya bhi kabhi aadmi say rootha hai?

haif, kay hum nain aitbaar kiya teray ahd-o-paimaan par
log kehtay thy kay tera har waada jhoota hai

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Re: aik shair

sahi hei bilkul.

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Re: aik shair

very good,
magar bhai, :naraz:
yeh to aap ne logon ki baat maan li naa aur khayal kisi aur ka rakh rahe ho? khayal bhi logon ka hi rakhte rahe ho aap ne hamisha warna un ki maante kion. :slight_smile:

younto khyal tera bohat hay mujhe, magar sunta dosron ki hoon
kay tere khayal aur teri baaton ka koi faida kabhi nahi hota hai

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Re: aik shair

nahin yaar baat nahin maani…the logic of the rubaai goes somthing like this:

logon nain to kaha tha kay uss par aitbaar naan karon par phir bhi kar liya… ab ye hova hai kay wo humain chor gaya hai(ye hijar say nikaltaa hai)… laiken phir bhi uss ka khayaal hamisaa hamary saath rehtaa hai :smiley:

Hi,
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Re: aik shair

its really nice chacha.me like it.u hav talent.keep up the gud work

~**~ GEO ~**~ Shoaib malik and sania mirza [merged]
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Re: aik shair

Although the thought behind this verse isn't new but still its not bad for a first attempt...

I like the first misraa...

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Re: aik shair

adaab arz hai... nawazish

~**~ GEO ~**~ Shoaib malik and sania mirza [merged]
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Re: aik shair

:) . bara zoo-maani sher keh dya hai aap nay bhai.

agar woh milnay say aajiz hay, to aap ko to logon ne bata dya hai
agar us ka itna khayal rehta hay, to milnay so koi chota hota hai?

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Re: aik shair

Acha hai chacha jee achi advice hai main tow ab logo n ki nahi mano ga

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Re: aik shair

aji isi liye to hum apnay lahoo say ye ash'aar likh rahy hain ta kay doosron ko faida pohanchay :D