Abhi kuch khawab baqi hen........!

**Abhi kuch khawab baqi hen abhi kuch din bikharne do
in hathon ki lakeeron se abhi kuch rait phisalnay do

bohat betaab karti hai muje sawan ki ye barish
men ankhen band kar lon gi ise kuch din barasne do

bohat chaha k chal niklen kisi anjan raste par
magar kismat ki ye marzi ise ye zid bhi karne do

bohat socha bohat chaha rakhen rangon se fasla
bahelne kuch laga hai dil to ise ab bach nikalne do

agarcha waqt marham hay ye bikhra simat hi jae ga
magar khwabon k sheeshon per ise kuch aur chalne do.

hope u people like it.:slight_smile:
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Re: Abhi kuch khawab baqi hen…!

:eek:

you wrote it :hayaa:???

It’s simply awesome :k:

Fluent, balanced, easy but effective diction… Keep up the good work :k:

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thank u soo much AQ.i just compose it the night before.

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You have a talent for sure.

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amazing poem, abeeha.
best,
Dushwari

each sher is really beautiful n so touching..

Wow buhat zabardast...........ik tasalsul hai poory poem main........lagata hai it was raining out side when you wrote this one:) Zabardast you got the talent keep it up:)

thanx all of u:)

Re: Abhi kuch khawab baqi hen........!

v nice abeeha..

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waaaaaaah buhut dilkash abihaa......aakhri 2 sheron men tawazun kam hy..lekin i hop aajayga.....next time.....

Re: Abhi kuch khawab baqi hen…!

simply gudd :k:

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thnx S.786 and BY…n ya i hope ahista ahista balance aa jae ga…thnx for praising.

mohabbat ki haqqeqat ye dil kudh hi jaan jayay ga
kuch din us ki ulfat main issay tum aur tarapnay do

khadra hoon kay yahan manzil too kya rasta nahi dekhta
hawa bhi zid pey hai issay rasta kudh badalnay do

very nice .....i just add two shair hope you guys like ..................bus assay hi gazal perhtay pertay kuch zehan main aaya too like diya ............buhat khubsorat gazal hai abeeha very touching............

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thanx aloooot fiza...nd ya urs ones are also nice additon...

Re: Abhi kuch khawab baqi hen........!

wah wah buhat khoob

Re: Abhi kuch khawab baqi hen…!

thanx alooot Pehalwan

Re: Abhi kuch khawab baqi hen........!

hmm nice one again.. kinda being addicted to ur poetry.
par honestly.. "mohabbat kar ke aai ho" was much much better then this one i guess.

still good one..

thanks for sharing.!!!

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thanx for ur sincere comments....

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ur comments always amde me think where my words went wrong.
so had to give u the sincere comments..

u r always welcome.!

Bohat Khoob...

Main is section main kam he aata hoon... lakin aisi shari parhnay ko mil jaye to hamesha aoon.. bohat he achi tarha app ne yeh nazam likhi hai or lafzoon ke istamaal bohat khoob kia hai.... Thanks for sharing..

Keep up the good work.