Aik Nazm,
Meray Hum’nasheen, Meray Hum’safar
Nahin Tum Se Koi Gila Magar
Do Mera Thora Sa Sath Tum
Chalo Meray Hath Ko Thaam Ker
Rahay Tum Se Duur Jo Aik pal
Meray Dil Main Itna Kahaan Sabar
Meri Baat Kion Nahi Maan’tay
Kion Mujh Pe Kertay Ho Tum Jabar
Meray Hum’nasheen, Meray Hum’safar
Abb Khush Ho Na Mujhe Maar Ker
(Ahmer)
Umeed Hai Aap Logon Ko Pasand Aye Gi..
Regards,
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nice try Ahmer. although i dont know any thing about wazans and all but its good :p
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appreciable effort janab
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^ kafi wazni hia SHeal nad redo bohat khob try keep it up :)
Re: Abb Khush Ho Na Mujhe Maar Ker..
nice one RI.....achi sharing hy...
Re: Abb Khush Ho Na Mujhe Maar Ker..
thanx for sharin
Re: Abb Khush Ho Na Mujhe Maar Ker..
aab sab ka buhat shukria :)
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Ahmer Sahib!
achhi ghazal hay... paRh ker lutf aaya... ! Ghazal puri behar maiN hi hay bas zara doosray she'r ka pehla misra aur chothay she'r ka doosra misra zara si tavajja chahta hay... aap dekh lijay ga... umeed hay aap meri baat ko meHsoos naheeN keraiN gay....
daad haazir-e-khidmat hay... qabool kijay....
Muhammad Ahmed.
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thanks alot Ahmed jee.. n aap theek keh rahay hain.. mujhe bhi problem lagti hai 2nd sher k pehle misray main.. aap kuch suggest kejay.. meray to zehen main kuch nahi araha 
buhat buhat shukria pazeerai ka 
Ahmer,
duusray she'r kay pehlay misray kay liay maiN ye 3 misray tajveez ker raha hooN jo aap ko Theek lagay apna lijay ga... aur apnay hisaab say Theek bhi ker lijay ga.
"mera saath do kisi roz tum"
ya
"ghaRi do ghaRi mera saath do"
ya phir
"mera saath do kabhi chaar pal"
aik baat aur bhi kahooN ga kay choThay she'r maiN aap nay lafz "jabar" baandha hay jis ka saHeeH talaffuz "jabr" jis say wazn kharaab honay ka ahtemaal hay.... aap is misray ko bhi apnay hisaab say change ker lijay ga..
umeed hay aap in tamaam batoN ko meHsoos naheeN keraiN gay, maiN sirf tajaaveez day raha hooN warna mera ilm aur tajarba bhi bohat hi meHdood hay aur maiN khud bhi abhi seekhnay kay amal ka hi hissa hooN...
Allah aap ko shaad rakhay (aameen).
Mukhlis,
Muhammad Ahmed.
Re: Abb Khush Ho Na Mujhe Maar Ker..
nice one
Re: Abb Khush Ho Na Mujhe Maar Ker..
waah ahmar...achhi koshish hy...aek sher yaad aaya...
,,mery hamsafar mery ham nashin ye duaa hy koi gila nhi..
tujhy is jahaan men wo sukh mily,ju mujhy kabhi bhi milaa nhi,,
thanks
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@ ahmed.. ghari do ghari wala mujhe buhat acha laga.. 
i will keep it
Re: Abb Khush Ho Na Mujhe Maar Ker..
buhat khoob..............zabardast..perh kar maza aaya...........keep writting and keep sharing..thanks
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thank you fiza :)
gud one