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Arts & Culture Poetry ( Intikhaab & Sho'ra-e-Gupshup)
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..not as good as Amal, Amjad Choohan and Rauman

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  • Aik roz utthaiN gaee mohabat ka alam bhi
    aik roz sawariaN gae terey zulf kae kham bhi

roiaN gae dair talk dhar-u-haram bhi
rakhian gae hamiaN yadd pathar ka sanam bhi

Uss taufaN sae guzar jataiaN haiaN taufaan key manad
ruktay haiaN jahaN gardas-e-duraN kay qadam bhi

Dewana samjhatay haiaN jinahaiN ahal-e-zamana
rakhtay haiaN wohey logg mohabat ka bharam bhi*

  • When a blind man carries a lame man,
    both go forward*
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[quote]
Originally posted by juMurA:
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Uss taufaN sae guzar jataiaN haiaN taufaan key manad
ruktay haiaN jahaN gardas-e-duraN kay qadam bhi

Dewana samjhatay haiaN jinahaiN ahal-e-zamana
rakhtay haiaN wohey logg mohabat ka bharam bhi**
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v nice J

~kabi alwida na kahNa~

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Waaao…that’s soooooo nice to see your own poetry juMurA

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… and believe me it is as good as "Amal, Amjad Choohan and Rauman

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." … keep it up

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MeiN pal do pal ka shaaer hooN…

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~rakhian gae hamiaN yadd pathar ka sanam bhi~

These words were the best of the whole poem. Did you write it yourself JuMura? I was speechless when I read this; rakhen ge yaad hamen patthar ke sanam bhi…!!!@#$

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~ Mehshar mein le gayi thi, tabiyat ki saadgi
Lekin bare khuloos se hum laut aaye hain…

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bahut khoob :)

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NakamiJ shukriya :wink:

Amal thanx for liking it i realy appreciate that comment from you

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janne-e-ghazal jii :slight_smile:

~sehar~ thanx

  • When a blind man carries a lame man,
    both go forward*
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wavoo…thats very nice but ayk mistake hay iss main…yeh mughay aap kiss group main shamil kur raahay ho…i mean Amal aur R.Ali kay saath…no way juMura … mayri place main Nikami ko rukh do phir theek hay

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ye aap ham to bojh hai.n zamiin kaa
zamii.n kaa bojh uThaane vaale kyaa hue

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woooooowwwww juMura ge very hi nice

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ap bhi shair bungaye ab allah hi

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~~Experience is the worst teacher; it gives the test before presenting the lesson.~~

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Amjad chohan thanx

mistakes tu bohat karta hooN lakin regret kam

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karta hoon and there is nothing to regret you are in right group

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jahaN taq Nikamij haian waqey ghaltey hoo gaee app kah kahanay par yadd aya..par abb hou gae tu kya karian?

NukamiJ

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  • When a blind man carries a lame man,
    both go forward*
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CC your sympathies are accepted with ill fated heart

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shair:? Itnoo ko bardashat kar rahey haian aik aur sahey

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me no shair ya kam merray bass ka nahey,yeh department sharioN ka hay. me only suunay walla and parhanay walla

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  • When a blind man carries a lame man,
    both go forward*
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very nice jumru…

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mairay dill mairay mussafir

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Buhat khoob..utha leejiye jaldee yeh alam bhee…magar yeh kham to buhat naughty hain..dhiyan rahe

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You are most welcome juMurA ji

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but don’t forget to share more with us

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MeiN pal do pal ka shaaer hooN…

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[quote]
Originally posted by juMurA:
*..
Dewana samjhatay haiaN jinahaiN ahal-e-zamana
rakhtay haiaN wohey logg mohabat ka bharam bhi

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indeed very nice :)

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Zabardast

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