Janaab aap poetest hai very nice…
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Now just waiting for Meena's reply then I will post the real one...
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Ae kash kabhi mera wo dildaar naa hota
Ae kash mujhay uss say kabhi piyar naa hota..
Ajb sa drd deke mujhay, dooor chal diya,
ae kash mujhay uss ka intizaar naa hota,
karta na jo dagha kabhi, wafaa ko thaamta,
fehrist-e-bewafa me woh shumaar naa hota,
tarpi bohat, roii bohat, uss ne naa ki fiker,
ae kash mera dil kabhi laachaar naa hota,
rehta jo mere sath woh saae ki tarha gar,
dil me bhara dukhon ka phir ambaar naa hota,
manjdhaar beech chhorr ke jaae jo bewafa,
Allah ray! Koi aisa wafadaar naa hota,
Wada kia, khaai qasam, tora mera yaqee,
Ya Muqtadir! Mera sanam fankaar naa hota,
Maloom na tha, isqadar badal woh jaae ga,
Behtar tha, apne darmiyaan izhaar naa hota,
Aata nahin jo meri zindagi me kabhi woh.....
..dil uss ke piyar kaa bhi talabgaar naa hota,
kat jaati saari umr, muhabbat me, piyar me..
aashiq jo mera jhoot peh sawaar naa hota,
woh laut naa aaya, raha da’wa mera qaaem,
vrna to mujhay khud peh ikhtiiyaar naa hota,
hota jo paikar-e-wafa her ikk bashr yahan,
to meri tarhaa phir koi khuuwar naa hota,
dil ki khuuli jo rehti na khirki tamam umr…
...khatkaa tri aamad ka baar baar naa hota,
suna hay, uske charchay hen, doojay sheher me abb,
ae kaash koi doosra shiikaar naa hota!
Chahta mujhay who isqadar, na hosh me rehta,
Ranjish rahi, mera sanam ghaddar naa hota,
Jaatay me thori roshni ki aas jo deta,
Tanhaaiiyyon me jeena bhi dushwaar naa hota,
Gaya jo, laga rog bhi, bdnaam bhi hoii..
Meena ka kaash koi raazdaar naa hota!!!
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very nice meena
Yeh bhi sahi hai...
thanx
Janaab aap poetest hai very nice.......
i will take this as compliment :) thanx
Ae kash kabhi mera wo dildaar naa hota Ae kash mujhay uss say kabhi piyar naa hota..
Ajb sa drd deke mujhay, dooor chal diya, ae kash mujhay uss ka intizaar naa hota,
karta na jo dagha kabhi, wafaa ko thaamta, fehrist-e-bewafa me woh shumaar naa hota,
tarpi bohat, roii bohat, uss ne naa ki fiker, ae kash mera dil kabhi laachaar naa hota,
rehta jo mere sath woh saae ki tarha gar, dil me bhara dukhon ka phir ambaar naa hota,
manjdhaar beech chhorr ke jaae jo bewafa, Allah ray! Koi aisa wafadaar naa hota,
Wada kia, khaai qasam, tora mera yaqee, Ya Muqtadir! Mera sanam fankaar naa hota,
Maloom na tha, isqadar badal woh jaae ga, Behtar tha, apne darmiyaan izhaar naa hota,
Aata nahin jo meri zindagi me kabhi woh..... ..dil uss ke piyar kaa bhi talabgaar naa hota,
kat jaati saari umr, muhabbat me, piyar me.. aashiq jo mera jhoot peh sawaar naa hota,
woh laut naa aaya, raha da’wa mera qaaem, vrna to mujhay khud peh ikhtiiyaar naa hota,
hota jo paikar-e-wafa her ikk bashr yahan, to meri tarhaa phir koi khuuwar naa hota,
dil ki khuuli jo rehti na khirki tamam umr… ...khatkaa tri aamad ka baar baar naa hota,
suna hay, uske charchay hen, doojay sheher me abb, ae kaash koi doosra shiikaar naa hota!
Chahta mujhay who isqadar, na hosh me rehta, Ranjish rahi, mera sanam ghaddar naa hota,
Jaatay me thori roshni ki aas jo deta, Tanhaaiiyyon me jeena bhi dushwaar naa hota,
Gaya jo, laga rog bhi, bdnaam bhi hoii.. Meena ka kaash koi raazdaar naa hota!!!
Excellent Meena g..
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Now real one please:
Aie kaash kabhi mera wo dildar na hoti
paa laita ousay, shohrat ki gar talabgaar na hoti
Jalway teray husan key daikh jo paati
tou yeh duniya meri baaton say aazaar na hoti
yaa aankhain na hotin ya yeh dil he na hota
ya soorat teri husn say sarshaar na hoti
jitni bhi rafaqat thi faqat meri wafa thi
warna teri marzi say ik baar na hoti
ghairon ki taraf teri bari nigah-e-karam thi
aie kaash raqeebon ki bhi yalghaar na hoti
shaayed main zindagi ko baray dhang say jeeta
soorat teri gar barsar e paikaar na hoti
kuch tera gharoor tha kuch meri anaa thi
aie kaash kabhi kismat bhi bezaar na hoti
hota jo "Raza" haath main insaaf ka parcham
tou tu bhi kabhi payaar ki haqdaar na hoti
Regards,
Ahmed Raza
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this is even really good :) wese logo logo batao kis ki best thi ?? :D chahy meri buri bhi ho, i will not mind per mujhay batao.....
this is even really good :) wese logo logo batao kis ki best thi ?? :D chahy meri buri bhi ho, i will not mind per mujhay batao.....
Ok g ur was good. By the way I am not poet and I don't need any appreciation in this regard. Its just part of game...dear..:)
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oho...hurt? shorry... i never meant like that... ok your poem was superb... :D really, ok but try my poetry taking it as yourself, like hoti hoti... puri poem meri hoti hoti ker ke parhen... bus faraq ye hoga ke a girl would think a pathan wrote the poem hehe :D
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Both r nice... n awesome...
PrAyErSS... & BlEssInGss...
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both are raelly nice..
keep it up guys
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Thanks for appreciation...guys...
oho...hurt? shorry... i never meant like that... ok your poem was superb... :D really, ok but try my poetry taking it as yourself, like hoti hoti... puri poem meri hoti hoti ker ke parhen... bus faraq ye hoga ke a girl would think a pathan wrote the poem hehe :D
hahaha gud joke. N no need to say sorry because I don't mind either urs good or mine doesn't matter for me because
"jis k liye likhtay thai wo mujh main nahi baaki"
"ab likhain tou kia likhain kisi shaam yeh sochain gay"
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muqarrar.....:D
muqarrar.....:D
Halla g...????
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ye kia tha? mene shair muqarar ka kaha tha ji...
hahaha gud joke. N no need to say sorry because I don't mind either urs good or mine doesn't matter for me because
"jis k liye likhtay thai wo mujh main nahi baaki" "ab likhain tou kia likhain kisi shaam yeh sochain gay"
socha pia te band gia zihda sochna nahi
socha pia te band gia zihda sochna nahi
Or jo banda socnhay say pehlay he gaya ho????????
Advise plz...
ye kia tha? mene shair muqarar ka kaha tha ji...
Chalain g aap nay kuch kaha ham nay kuch...