!POETS FIGHT CLUB~ AN EFFORT FOR SI

Sannan · May 9, 2006, 3:50am

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TUJH KO TANHA KAR GIA PHIR MUNFIRAD RAHNAY KA SHOUQ
AAB AKAILAY BAITH KAR YADOON KAY MANZAR DAIKHNA

sara_farooqui · May 9, 2006, 4:34am

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App yahan bhi baaz naa aaye,,,

Mai hoon taqdeer ki zulmat mai musafir Tanha
Roshni ho tto kahin apna hi saya dekhon

Sannan · May 9, 2006, 7:11am

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Toobh Toobah Aisa Naheen Sochtay …

Woh Waqat Nah Aay Kay Dil-e-Zar Bhi Sochay
Iss Shahar Main Tanha Koi Hum Say Hay Kah Tum Ho

Mirza_Ruswaa · May 9, 2006, 7:40am

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chand tanha hai aasmaaN tanhaa
neeNd ki gaud main jahaaN tanhaa
zindagi kiyaa issi ko kehtay hain
**jism tanha hai aur jaaN tanhaa
*jalti bujhti si roshni kay paray *
toota phoota sa ik makaaN tahna **

sara_farooqui · May 9, 2006, 8:11am

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Hum ,,, dastberdar,,,,, Mirza Saheb ke haq mai,,,, koi muqabila nahi un se humara..mumkin hi nahi,,,

Sannan · May 9, 2006, 9:18am

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Sara Jee Aap key dastbardari par ek shaer yaad aa gya …araz hay
**
Ek Faraz Tumheen Tanha Ho Jo Aab Tuk Dukh Kay Rasia Ho
Warna Aksar Dill Waloon Nay Darad Ka Rasta Chore Diya Hay **

Zamil · May 9, 2006, 11:43am

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Assalaam o Alaikum…!
**Sab se pehle to aap sab ka shukria k aap ne mujhe is qabil samjha k main is POETS FIGHT CLUB mein judge k faraaiz anjaam de sakoon… **
(but it was a shock for me…)

**Jahan tak pehle muqaabile ki baat hai, ek se ek barrhiya ashaa’r parrhne ko mile jis ne mere liye decision ko bohat mushkil kar dia…:halo: **

(Bienglonely…! aap ne contestents k liye to rules bana diye par kuch rules agar judging k liye bhi bana k mujhe de dete to mere liye faisla karna aasaan ho jaata… )

Anyway…main ne apni samajh k mutaabiq faisla kia hai…
Main aap ko bataa deta hoon k main ne kaise judge kia… agar kisi ko koi bhi aaitraaz ho to wo mujhko PM mein likh k bhaij sakta hai…agar aaitraaz mein dam hua to I will change my judging style accordingly for next contests..OK…!!!

As BL told me..I skip those ash’aar jin mein lafz tanha k bajaaye tanhaai waghaira use hua tha…
Us k baad un ash’aar ko skip kar dia jin mein kuch lafz missing they or jis ki waja se un ka balance out hua hua tha…

And finally I chose the one k jo zyaada poetic na ho, real ho or emotional ho…

And here it is…the winning she’r…

**Congratulations SANNAN…!!! **

being_lonely · May 9, 2006, 6:17pm

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Sannan mubarkaann mubarak ho sannan bhai aap pehle winner of this club.
I really got pleasure that you wins a friend of urs BEING LONELY:hug: :hugz:

sara_farooqui · May 10, 2006, 3:54am

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**Ahhhhaaa, Buhat Buhat Mubarik hoo Sannan jiii, **
Hum ko duain doo tumhain QATIL bana diyaaa

kheir, aik bar phir Buhat Buhat Mubarik hoo apko, Allah apko aisi oor is se berh ker bhi hazaroon kamiyabiya Atta fermaye,

sunny_nicky · May 10, 2006, 4:19am

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hi salam congrulations sannan gee waisay zamil gee aik baat galat hai es muqabalay main sirf aik shair kaha tha likhne ko en hone tu pata nahe 3 ya 4 post kar diye zara reply kar djea ga ok bye

Sannan · May 10, 2006, 5:21am

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Many thanks for selecting my she’r and I ve inspired by Zamil’s last words “And finally I chose the one k jo zyaada poetic na ho, real ho or emotional ho...”

Now telling you honestly that it was my all time favorite she’r and when first time I started to write my diary I wrote this she’r along with another she’r. It really refresh my memories……

Thank SID on your heartiest congrat. and now I’m waiting for others comments that they agreed with Zamil or not …………
Thanks Sara as usual your way of congr. was marvelous ……
Sunny I think fight mean continuously fight and I think we should continuously send She’r ….

Sannan · May 10, 2006, 5:29am

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Now i’m selecting word “UDAAS” SAD and sending you this nice she’r

**
Aay Hasil-e-Khaloos Bata Kia Jawab Doon
Dunya Yah Poochti Hay Main Keon Udaas Hoon**

sara_farooqui · May 10, 2006, 7:19am

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hmmmmmm,,,, ab pehla sheir apka hai to,, dosra to meri taraf se hi hona chahiye na Sannan ji,,, oor,, Mubarik to apko deni hi tha na,,, kiu ke khushi bhi buhat hoi hai apki jeet ki,,,
Ahem, Ahemmm
{Yeh bhi adab humarey hain tumhain kia maloom
Hum tumhain jeet ke harey hain hain tumhai kia malom}
ha ha ha ha,,,
ab topic pe atey hain ,,,,

Yeh Udas udas rehna,yeh kisi se kuch na kehna **
**Yonhi besabab nahi hai, koi saneha to hoga

Sannan · May 10, 2006, 8:01am

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Hoooooonnnnnn to yeh baat hay , buhat khoub jee kia baat hay aap ki ......... aab main kia kar sakta hoon sara gee aap kuch kaheen aur hum chup rahin

{Raaz Kah Daitay Hain Nazuk Say Isharay Aksar
Kitni Khamoosh Muhabaat Key zaban hoti hay}

now come to the point ,,,,

{Aaj to be-sabab udaas hay ji
Ishaq Hota To Koi Baat Bhi Thi}

kaisa hay

being_lonely · May 10, 2006, 9:31am

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Hai mere dil se taaluk tamaam aalam ka
fiza udaas bohat chaandni niraas bohat

sara_farooqui · May 10, 2006, 9:40am

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hmmm,, **
**Ahha Sannan ji,,
{Aashar merey yoono to zamaney ke liye hain
kuch sheir faqat UN ko sunaney ke liye hain}

Topic,,,,,,,,,,
Dekhi hai us ki ankh mai pehli dafa nami
yoon lag raha hai jesey samndar Udas hai

isolatedgurl · May 10, 2006, 3:57pm

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Khushi milli tu kai dard mujhe say rooth gaye
Dua karoo main phir say udas hoo jaoon...

system · May 10, 2006, 7:37pm

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Mubarak ho sannan bhai u won m happy 2 hear this :) hope u got all the positive achivements in ur lie Diya

hmm g next fight bhi start ho gai n kaafi achay shair post ho rahay hain:)

system · May 10, 2006, 7:42pm

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Here is my choice :)

na ab vo yaadon kaa charhtaa dariyaa na fursaton ki UDAAS barkhaa
yuun he zaraa si kasak hai dil mein jo zakhm gaharaa thaa bhar gaya woh

being_lonely · May 10, 2006, 9:38pm

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*dil ko kyaa ho gayaa Khudaa jaane
kiyon hai aisaa UDAAS kya jaane *

*kah diyaa main ne haal-e-dil apana
is ko tum jaano yaa Khudaa jaane *