Re: my own nazam (Raat) رات
**welcome to GS and to the poet's corner. aapkii muKhtasir sii nazam bahooot pyaarii hai. dada qubool kijiye.
waah ke saath ab ek aah bhii sun lijiiye agar buraa na lage to :) aapne ek misr'e meN likhaa:
yeh guzartii nahiiN guzaare se
yahaN, "guzaare se" mujhe saHeeH nahiiN lagaa...saHeeH lafz hogaa "guzaarne se" kiuN k "guzaaraa" kahte haiN "guzar-basar" ko ya'nii "sustennance" (rozii rotii, rozgaar)]. agar dil qubool kare to plz nazar-e-saanii kar ke tasHeeH kar leN. shukria**